Description: i know there's some parts that are a bit chunky, but i don't know how else to put it into words.
I wrote this one after i finally opened up a little to someone because i realized i needed help with all my issues, but after talking to him, i felt oddly empty inside. it was a bad feeling
later, i realized it was because when i finally let go, i didn't hate as much as i used to, and i can't live without hating any more. i know it's horribly unhealthy, but i can't help it.
that was like 2 weeks ago, and i still feel really odd because i don't have as much hate inside me. so i'm afraid i'm gonna go out of my way to find someone else to hate so i can feel alive again. geez, i'm crazy.
Hate -------------------------------------------
Anger, Hate, Pain, and Confusion
Life spins out of control
Lock myself up in my illusion
Curl up in my little hole
I built, around me, a concrete wall
And hid behind my lies
Now it crumbles, and soon shall fall
Nowhere for me to hide
I cna't face this world alone
Hate burned me up inside
Blackened my heart, charred my bones
As I refused to cry
Those flames still live within me
Too late tobe put out
They are now part of my body
For I'm afraid to speak aloud
It matters not now, I fear
Nobody can understand
Why I try to choke back tears
Why I know I'm damned.
Cursed forevermore by Fate
I cannot live wiout my Hate
That was different. I love it. See luckily, when I talk about things like that, it just makes me hate whoever I was talking about even more. I don't know why though. But anyways, I don't think the flow was off. I enjoyed it. My favorite part is:
"Hate burned me up inside Blackened my heart, charred my bones As I refused to cry"
The last line is a perfect ending. As always, Great job
interesting... the subject drew me in and you didnt disappoint... i can relate somewhat... i was once filled with hate and anger too, but i found something to replace it with... yeah this sounds like bullsh*t, but it is true... i replaced my hate with love... eveything i used to hate i decided to either ignore or find a way to love... it worked... yeah many things piss me off and make me wanna kill someone, but instead on allowing that to fill me up i find something positive to focus on... i cant help you any more than that, the rest is up to you... hope you can find something to replace that hate with... good luck...
oh and the poem was great... it helps to put ink to paper, i know... keep writing and i'll keep reading...
wow...just how I have felt/feel. Strange how many things we have alike...hmm
This was very good, I have the same problem...I fianlly open/opened up to someone, and I just felt completely empty. I relized it was because I was letting go of the pain and anger, and letting other things that weren't so heavy fill me. But I still felt empty, like something I had for so long that I had gotten so used to had been ripped from me. It made an impression on me...
wow, now I have a poem idea. You are most helpful dear.
Great write, it's going in my favorites. Hang in there, and if you ever wanna talk, I'm here.
awsome grace! i really liked it! some of it the flow did seem a bit off, to me at least. who or what was this about? i connected to it alot cuz i too have issues with my hate as everyone should know by now lol. it reminds me of some of my stuff, but better, like, not as drawn out (long) as i tend to make mine
Submission Name: Hate
