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    dots Submission Name: Hatedots
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    Author: LoneWolf
    ASL Info:    16/F/Earth
    Elite Ratio:    4.35 - 136/108/19
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angst
    Total Views: 926
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    Description:
       i know there's some parts that are a bit chunky, but i don't know how else to put it into words.
    I wrote this one after i finally opened up a little to someone because i realized i needed help with all my issues, but after talking to him, i felt oddly empty inside. it was a bad feeling
    later, i realized it was because when i finally let go, i didn't hate as much as i used to, and i can't live without hating any more. i know it's horribly unhealthy, but i can't help it.
    that was like 2 weeks ago, and i still feel really odd because i don't have as much hate inside me. so i'm afraid i'm gonna go out of my way to find someone else to hate so i can feel alive again. geez, i'm crazy.


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    Anger, Hate, Pain, and Confusion
    Life spins out of control
    Lock myself up in my illusion
    Curl up in my little hole
    I built, around me, a concrete wall
    And hid behind my lies
    Now it crumbles, and soon shall fall
    Nowhere for me to hide
    I cna't face this world alone
    Hate burned me up inside
    Blackened my heart, charred my bones
    As I refused to cry
    Those flames still live within me
    Too late tobe put out
    They are now part of my body
    For I'm afraid to speak aloud
    It matters not now, I fear
    Nobody can understand
    Why I try to choke back tears
    Why I know I'm damned.
    Cursed forevermore by Fate
    I cannot live wiout my Hate




    Submitted on 2005-10-23 14:00:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That was different. I love it. See luckily, when I talk about things like that, it just makes me hate whoever I was talking about even more. I don't know why though. But anyways, I don't think the flow was off. I enjoyed it. My favorite part is:

    "Hate burned me up inside
    Blackened my heart, charred my bones
    As I refused to cry"

    The last line is a perfect ending. As always, Great job

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2006-01-08 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      interesting... the subject drew me in and you didnt disappoint...
    i can relate somewhat... i was once filled with hate and anger too, but i found something to replace it with... yeah this sounds like bullsh*t, but it is true... i replaced my hate with love... eveything i used to hate i decided to either ignore or find a way to love... it worked... yeah many things piss me off and make me wanna kill someone, but instead on allowing that to fill me up i find something positive to focus on... i cant help you any more than that, the rest is up to you... hope you can find something to replace that hate with... good luck...

    oh and the poem was great... it helps to put ink to paper, i know... keep writing and i'll keep reading...

    PEACE and LOVE, greg
    | Posted on 2005-12-02 00:00:00 | by geherald | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...just how I have felt/feel. Strange how many things we have alike...hmm

    This was very good, I have the same problem...I fianlly open/opened up to someone, and I just felt completely empty. I relized it was because I was letting go of the pain and anger, and letting other things that weren't so heavy fill me. But I still felt empty, like something I had for so long that I had gotten so used to had been ripped from me. It made an impression on me...

    wow, now I have a poem idea. You are most helpful dear.

    Great write, it's going in my favorites. Hang in there, and if you ever wanna talk, I'm here.

    -Miss M.
    | Posted on 2005-11-23 00:00:00 | by fightingirl19 | [ Reply to This ]
      awsome grace! i really liked it! some of it the flow did seem a bit off, to me at least. who or what was this about? i connected to it alot cuz i too have issues with my hate as everyone should know by now lol. it reminds me of some of my stuff, but better, like, not as drawn out (long) as i tend to make mine
    | Posted on 2005-11-10 00:00:00 | by gothic§kitteh | [ Reply to This ]


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