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    dots Submission Name: Kissing a Strangerdots
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    Author: She Is Insane
    Elite Ratio:    3.21 - 40/60/32
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       Poor girl.


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    dotsKissing a Strangerdots
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    I'm in love with a stranger.
    He's just a face,
    nothing more.

    But, even, if I wish that I did not
    love him, like I do, I can't help
    but look down when he touches
    my knee.

    I'm in love with his lips,
    as they curved to form
    an o shaped figure;
    or how they swiftly
    penetrate a cigarette
    in order to do/feel something.

    I'm in love with his dark eyes,
    that suppress many feelings.
    (locked doors with no keys)

    I'm in love with his slender hands,
    and am jealous whenever they
    caress another girl or glove.
    For I wish it was me , that he
    touch and never let go.


    I'm in love with his lips,
    those which kiss but never
    speak a single word, other
    than lies wrapped in a shiny
    bow tie ready to impress.

    There's nothing more horrible
    than to fall in love with a shadow.




    Submitted on 2005-10-23 15:09:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Wow, the passion shown here was stunning. Spellbinding piece, I was kept drawn inm unable to look up, my mind captured.
    Personally, however, I like to see a bit more mystery/metaphor. It is kind of straight forward relative to some stuff I've seenm but you conveyed your imagery very well.
    Tekin Kashami
    | Posted on 2005-10-24 00:00:00 | by Tekin_Kashami | [ Reply to This ]
      Very unusal but i did like it. You have done a good job with this. It makes you want to finish it all the way through to find ot what happens. Great job
    | Posted on 2005-10-24 00:00:00 | by ThatWasOnceMe | [ Reply to This ]


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