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    dots Submission Name: Losing a Child to Adoptiondots
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    Author: AlabamaFarmGirl
    ASL Info:    50/F/Alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 518/333/26
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 1158
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       Requested by and dedicated to psycho_1.
    I hope I have done this poem justice. I tried to put myself in your shoes and tried to feel how I thought you were feeling.


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    dotsLosing a Child to Adoptiondots
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    The day came for you to be born
    My heart so full, oh how I did mourn
    Not to be selfish, I had to let you go
    Trying so hard not to let the pain show
    Carrying you baby, beneath my own heart
    Knowing our lives would be lived apart
    Wondering what tomorrow should bring
    But knowing I was doing the right thing
    So young, doing what I was told
    Hurting so, given birth, then noone to hold
    Ached as I watched them carry you away
    Moments, I cry even to this very day
    I wonder what color are your eyes?
    What makes you laugh, what makes you cry?
    The warmth you feel when you are feeling blue
    Baby, your birth Mother is gently holding you
    In my mind you will always stay
    Yesterday, today and always
    When you come upon one of God's little doves
    Think of this, as me sending you all my love
    Never forgetting, here you will always be
    Deep within my heart, living inside of me.

    written by:LindaH





    Submitted on 2005-10-24 11:27:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I just read this again and it still brings tears to my eyes, you are such a special friend Linda and I thank God that I've met you and we became friends!
    I miss my kids every day and reading this poem gets me through the tough times when I cry; thank you again Linda, I love you!!!
    | Posted on 2006-04-27 00:00:00 | by psycho_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      I really loved this poem... It really showed your true feelings, they jumped off the page at me. I can't imagine how hard this situation must have been.
    | Posted on 2006-04-10 00:00:00 | by Kelly17 | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful! Just beautiful. This was great writing. You really did walk in the shoes needed for this poem. And you did this for a friend. That was very sweet of you. I think that the flow was natural. And each word was heartfelt. We felt the loss, and guilt along with the mother. This to is another favorite. I loved the way you said for the child to look upon a dove and then the child would feel your love. This was some of the best writing I've seen in awhile.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-12-04 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      the title caught my eye because i was adopted.
    as i read this, i couldn't help but think of my
    birth mother, who i have never had contact with.

    this was very touching. i liked the dove
    reference very much.. this poem got me to
    thinking..

    peace,
    ~Cat
    | Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a heart-felt dedication to someone who had to make one of the hardest and bravest decisions in life - to let someone you love go so they can do better.
    The wording was honest and motherly and you really did a great write here!
    Love,Peace,Joy! tif
    | Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Such a lovely and well written poem for a friend. This poem must mean so much to her, it is such a touching and caring poem. A wonderful gesture on your part. I can only imagine how hard this must be to carry a baby inside you and then give it up for adoption. It must be such a difficult decision to make but also a very mature and responsible decision if you cannot manage all the many aspects of raising a child. This poem really expresses the feelings one must go through with this kind of ordeal. Another wonderful poem from you! Take care!

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-10-29 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, Linda..
    This is really beautiful. Such deep emotion throughout each line. One can sense the heartbreak and love of the mother for her child. The desparate longing.
    A wonderful write.
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-10-25 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Thank you so much for this beautiful poem Linda, it made me cry... I really appreciate you writing this for me, you are a very special friend and will always be in my heart!

    -Melissa
    | Posted on 2005-10-24 00:00:00 | by psycho_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      You definately did Psycho1 justice
    This poem brought tears to my eyes and I want you to know My mother was adopted I called her in NJ and read her this poem and she couldnt stop crying saying how beutiful it was
    An exceptional write
    Great Job
    Ron

    Thanks for your recent comments to Please keep in touch
    | Posted on 2005-10-24 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      What can I say. For you to write such a thing for someone, speaks volumes to me as the kind of person you are. Bursting at the seams with love, passion and raw love for a mother losing her little one. Well done Linda, I admire you very much for writing this for Psycho 1
    | Posted on 2005-10-24 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this poem, it really shows the deep feelings of a young mother having to give away her child because it's the right thing to do. This is very beautiful, it made me want to cry. Did phycho_1 actually go through this? God, I hope not, the pain of losing a loved one is hard but when it's loosing a child and they don't actually die...that's awful. I'm adding it to my favorites, great job, deserves five stars.
    | Posted on 2005-10-24 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]


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