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Submission Name: The Search dots

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Author:	StevenJay
ASL Info:	21, Male, Chicago
Elite Ratio:	3.41 - 27/36/14
Words:	136

Class/Type:	Misc/Misc
Total Views:	220
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	878

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Finding true love is one of the hardest things I have ever come across. I have had it and lost it, and the search continue to go on and on even though at times it is a bumpy road to travel down.

The Search dots

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Stranger I know you’re out there,
Hidden within the faces in the crowd
Camouflaged within the greens, blues, and browns
Of peering eyes that stare into my soul,
Stranger I know you’re out there,
Waiting for me like I’m waiting for you
Tapping your feet impatient
Time ticks but it’s frozen
Because loneliness takes over our everything,
Stranger I know you’re out there,
Praying for me to take you away
Take you away from yesterday
And let tomorrows sun shine through your window
So you can finally wake up with a smile,
Stranger I know you’re out there,
And I’m searching for you
I’m hoping some day our paths will finally meet and diverge into one
Because I’m longing to look into your eyes green, blue, or brown
And know that it’s meant to be

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||| Comments |||
  Still looking for the right one? Don't get in to big of a hurry for this could be the biggest hurt of your life. Be patient, believe me the right person is well worth the wait. The longing in your poem is very expressed, feelings are coming through strong and clear. Very well done!
| Posted on 2005-10-25 00:00:00 | by AlabamaFarmGirl | [ Reply to This ]
  As a minor, I am just starting to experience a real relationship and all that jazz, but that doesn't mean I can't understand it. I understand completely what you're talking about. It's a very good poem, easy to understand, and oh-so-ever cute. It's taking the optomistic path in love and that hoping someday it will reach out to you. Anyhow, it's a very VERY well-written poem. I loved it.
| Posted on 2005-10-24 00:00:00 | by BenevolantWords | [ Reply to This ]
  aww this is so cute and cute. Yes one day we will find the one we love and one day we will be happy. One day. But until then i'll comment on this poem. It was really good. I think you should've broken it up into stanza's since you repeated a certain line. Other than that it was good. Keep writing.
Much Luv and Support,
Danni
| Posted on 2005-10-24 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]

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