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Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333 /325 /104
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Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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But yea i wrote this yesterday. I haven't edited it yet but tell me what you think about it. I was in a real poetic again tell me what you think....

I am

I am...the only girl
who would say this
is a rap not a song

i am the only girl
who will stay true
i'm never gone

I am the only girl
who would use
every cuss word in a poem

I am the only girl
who rose up against all odds
just to show'em

I am the only girl
to say a nigga
never beat me down

'Cause if a nigga
come at me with his fist
his ass would be on the ground

I am the only girl
who will sing
hip hops her vibe

I am the only girl
so determined to keep
my dream alive

I am not the only girl
whose ever lived
over seas

but i'm the only girl
who will really honestly
listen to Alicia Keys

I am the only girl
whose cat Kenny G
is a bicolored persian

I am the only girl
I know..really
who is a 15 year old virgin

Submitted on 2005-10-24 16:15:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this was cool. u shouldn't tell that alicia keys line to iluvpoetry becuz she'll argue with you all day about how she loves and fully understands alicia keys. this was tight. like a look into the heart and soul of danni. not a very long stare, just a peek and maybe its better that way. good write babe. oh yeah...def jam poetry vibe gets two thumbs up. i love hip hop poetry. holla!
| Posted on 2005-10-25 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  Yeah! KICK SOME ASS! Wooo...

Yeah, I may not have the same situation, but I thought it was funny how you just threw in some random stuff. I liked it though.

Being a virgin isn't bad... cause once you start you're like addicted lol.

I like the poem though. It was okay. Kinda random...a lot. okay. Kick ass.
| Posted on 2005-10-24 00:00:00 | by BenevolantWords | [ Reply to This ]
  I really love this poem. It has alot of heart. But your not alone i am too a 15 year old virgin, i want to keep it that way for awhile. Your poem made me feel like it was ok to put your deams before sex.
| Posted on 2005-10-24 00:00:00 | by hidden_cry | [ Reply to This ]

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