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    dots Submission Name: Snap 10-23-05dots
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    Author: xmangaXfreakx
    ASL Info:    13/f/IL
    Elite Ratio:    2.77 - 31/30/22
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 775
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    Bytes: 710



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       I'm writing a sog a day for a year. That's why it's dated. If you veiw it, comment it. That's my stand. bye!


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    dotsSnap 10-23-05dots
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    I hold my eyes closed for a minute, go to my thinkin' place. You always willing to leave me on the ground, to save a little face.

    You always bring me down on purpose, why must I live through this? Oh, I'm talking to you.

    Don't look around, so innocent, as of now, my life's been spent on you.

    I was your rock, I held you up, but your my acid rain. These tears falling from my eyes are tears of pain.

    You always bring me down on purpose, why must I live through this? Oh, I'm talking to you.

    You can't run away forever! You think I'll catch you never. Oh, you got another thing coming.





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      This is cool because it's prose-ish, but it's also pretty poetic. There's a few little typos, like "yours" but nothing that interrupts the way it goes. If you get a good melody, the song will rock.
    | Posted on 2005-10-24 00:00:00 | by Aaron Felix | [ Reply to This ]


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