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    dots Submission Name: lost socksdots
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    Author: scienceyear
    ASL Info:    30 male Binghamton, NY
    Elite Ratio:    5.82 - 81/27/3
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Description:
       PLEASE NOTE: I CONSIDER LOST SOCKS 2ND EDITION TO BE THE DEFINITIVE EDITION OF THIS POEM. I welcome any and all feedback and remarks, of any level so don't be shy. This was inspired by a sudden strange rush of emotion I had while retrieving my laundry. I thought the metaphor was cute, and inevitably with my mind, it got very dark. Please reply away. More poetry to come.


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    dotslost socksdots
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    Nobody's looking for us.
    We are just counted as lost.
    No alert goes out.
    Does our mate even care?
    Let's face it. We were an afterthought to begin with.
    A last minute thoughtless gift.
    And the same thoughtlessness faces us now. But this sock will not be bitter because few people are treated any better.




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      Short but sweet.. out of short poems, this has be one of my favorites...
    Such a big thing you got out this little poem
    Love the way u socks(laundry)
    | Posted on 2006-02-16 00:00:00 | by UnHoLyPoPe | [ Reply to This ]
      i didn't know where u were going with the whole lost sock thing. great comparison. and i know i would've have never thought of anything like this. very creative write.
    | Posted on 2006-01-15 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this Metaphor- People Being treated like Laundry, Like that forgotten sock Left under the bed, Sweaty and worn out, Cold and alone, and rarely thought about til some A$$hole wants to use us for there own personal use.
    Can I use this Idea for my Own piece?
    | Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by Atrip187 | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice job on this metaphor. We all have wondered where that one sock has gone. It is a great mystery of the universe.

    This plays well of that piece of common consciousness.

    Some thoughts:
    I am not big on surprise endings. While they can have a place, they often do not hit the mark the writer intended. Rather than sinking in, they just bounce off. Maybe just me, but I think it would have more impact if you opened with the ending and then repeated it as a close.

    Again just me.
    This is well written.
    I enjoyed the read.

    Chrystine
    | Posted on 2005-12-19 00:00:00 | by beatthedrum | [ Reply to This ]
      Very interesting, Talk about a whole different view on something as simple as socks! Amazing how you can realate this little poem to so many things
    | Posted on 2005-11-05 00:00:00 | by d_bc_0_0_p_e_r | [ Reply to This ]
      This is my new Favorite! Short, but more meaningful than anything i've read in such a long time. Strange, how something as unimportant as a sock, can make you look at things you never would have otherwise. Thanks for writing it.
    | Posted on 2005-10-28 00:00:00 | by soul full | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't feel as though we are all lost. We all have a purpose and a reason to be here. No lost sock resemblence being felt on this end. We are not afterthoughts...by looking at each and every person around me, I am sure that plenty of thought has been put into each and every individual person. Down to the littlest detail. This was rather negative and misguiding. Did nothing for me.

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-10-27 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      i didnt really understand that at all. i think you should work on that a bit more and change things. i couldnt figure it out.. is it you lost your socks or are people missing?
    | Posted on 2005-10-25 00:00:00 | by Christina69 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really... intresting. Strange and didn't make much sense to me. I did notice that the whole thing seemed a bit crowed and didn't really seem to flow, maybe you should work on that?
    | Posted on 2005-10-24 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]


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