wow, this poem was original, and hallarious, and a fav! wow, its so amazing the stupid and silly stuff we can write.... and where the hell did you get the title.... masterbation... i was lmao... yah its cool, funy, and hillarious!!!!!!!, anyway continue the great work, and yah hmmm, what was i saying.... oh wait was i talking to myself i dont know, anyway, i just arrived from KFC... mmmmmMmmMmmMmmmm, chicken rules... i also love cats.... want to taste some, they taste just like chicken!!! anyway, if you want to help me save the trees, do like me and eat the beavers!!!, but seriously i loved ur title, made me crack up, anyway cya!
why is it that something with a title like this will undoubtedly get the most views out of anything you post? hee hee. i liked it, very well done. i thought i should read something of yours since you took the time to comment on mine. i think you're my new god. :D
yeah a few errors and it would definately make it better cause I kept stopping and in my head correcting you which you don't want the reader to do....but I get the little Masterbation thing and Humpty Dumpty and all but what does this mean really? I mean I understand the piece I just don't really know why or what the whole bottom line is here? LT
Sorry, I posted before I wanted too. All I have left to say is this peice was interesting and if you change the few errors you have a good poem on your hands. I would also like to formally welcome you to the site. It is wonderful, handsdown the best writing community I've been part of. Hope to see you around. PEACE.
I too was drawn to this poem by the unique title, but I can't really see how this rtelates to masturbation. I didn't write it (obviously), but this doesn't seem to be about masturbation at all. It seems to me that here you are speaking of heart break, but what do I know. Perhaps Humpty Dumpty is used to relate to the breaking of a certain sexual organ (not to totally point any fingers, or other body parts for that matter), but I believe you can see where this particular third eye is coming from. I mean, come on, do I have to spell it out for you. Other than that though I really enjoyed this peice and look forward to reading some more of your rather creative peices. Some typo's= screem is really scream; perhaps you should change the sixth line to "I will try to fix you" to create a better parallel rhythm to link with the fifth line. The second to the last line has moon spelled with two 'n's.