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    dots Submission Name: sappy lovey dovey lovelinessdots
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    Author: Kristen Gudsnuk
    ASL Info:    21/f/CT
    Elite Ratio:    5.62 - 182/229/86
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 888
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 454



    Description:
       hehe... it's about that special someone... hehehehehehehehe I get dizzy... it's pretty self-explanatory though. No deep hidden meanings here.


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    dotssappy lovey dovey lovelinessdots
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    I havenít seen you in a while
    Itís got me kind of down
    Iíve always got one eye turned
    To see if youíre around

    My muscles have gone lax and died
    My sighs empty and long
    Itís been a while since we have talked
    And reveled in your songs

    These few days have spoiled my mood
    Like milk left on the stove
    A few days without drink or food
    A few days without love




    Submitted on 2005-10-24 23:31:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Is it me or does your tone remind me of the child/cynic Ogden Nash in all his mesmerizing, maniacal best? You seem to have your tongue firmly planted in your cheek in each write, as you explore serious material in a flippant manner (perhaps to divert attention from yourself while in defense mode?). As of this post, I've read almost everything you've written for this site, and I must say you have a unique style and a great deal of promise. Keep writing, the world is yours.
    | Posted on 2005-12-06 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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