Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: The New Student... Part 2dots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: solemnpen
    ASL Info:    18
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 303/339/42
    Words: 234
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1011
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1525



    Description:
       I AM NOT HUNG UP ON MYSELF... LOL I KNOW HOW IT MAY SEEM


    But yaw'll have to understand, that I have always been at a pretty bad school.. I do have a street reputation for a bad attitude and winning rap competitions...

    Well I moved.. so i had to go to another school.. To this school, where everything is so "perfect".. well these kids are my age.. and they hear of things that go on around town.. and as in pt. 1 my reputation proceeds me....

    And i just find it funny as hell. but oh well


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsThe New Student... Part 2dots
    -------------------------------------------


    Another day of my reign
    As the high school freestyle king


    Walking through these halls, Always attracts a stall
    Still ripped, Still big.. aint afraid to break fucking laws
    Seeing the clothes I wear, They all sit and stare
    Afraid to speak, but scared to ignore
    After seeing the last bitch, I put through a door
    Did my 3 day bid, Hoping shit will change
    Keep winning competitions, to keep pocket change
    Still spitting "lunchtime" flows, keeping it straight

    Looked down upon, because of what I do
    Not one little bitch, will look me in the eye
    and tell me the truth, they run so they can lie
    Never seen a pit, battle scarred at 16
    Never ran across somebody, this mean
    It's starting to get obscene, It's getting to me
    These preppy pussies won't let me be
    So curious about the nights, I ride till dawn
    "What's it like to drink, under 21?"


    The new student, Claims this school for him
    Because none of these, overprotected kids
    Will never have the heart to challenge him
    They've never seen somebody who lives true
    To his life, To his ways, To his roots
    Engulfed in pride, I walk with my head high
    Just the sight of me, Makes the whole school cry

    Teachers, principals, and students alike
    All are afraid of me... and that's quite fucking sad




    Submitted on 2005-10-24 23:33:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      "i call it the confidence of one whose been tested in battle. a true darksyde soldier. "
    -Troy Clever

    okay, troy u must know, you're making me very happy. lol. its good to see that my partners are still up to no good. i gotta get up to date, i don't even know who y'all beffing wit anymore.

    its been a while hasn't it cade? well sensei's back, at least for the moment. good [censored], i have faith in you n troy that darksyde is still going strong. lol D Syde. get rich or die trying like a silly [censored]
    | Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by Aknahlij_d 1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Good ish...the flow itself...I know them days oh too well.

    It's probably hard to believe that I was the bytch of the whole high school huh? LOL

    but...the thing is...when I look back now...I would have changed all of that. I would have gotten my full education and at least tried to get along with my peers. People only liked me because they lived in fear of me. They were fake. I only had a few true friends that saw me for me.

    You are definitely expressing yourself here and I really like that. You did your flow and kept it on point. The words itself...try and better yourself. Try to be the one that people see and speak good of. You will make it farther that way!

    Great job!

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-11-14 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      i've never been in any kinda rap competitions and the only kids at my new school that've heard me rap is when i rap my speeches in speech class. i really don't have a rep and if i do, i just haven't realized it yet. yeah u do seem a lil hung up on urself. some would call u a cocky [censored]. me, i call it the confidence of one whose been tested in battle. a true darksyde soldier.
    | Posted on 2005-10-25 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      Actually, it is sad for two reasons: no one is reaching out to you because they assume they'll get slapped down, and you refuse to communicate with them because they seem so shallow. Sorry, I can only measure the work by what you've written. Tough schools, tough homes and tough lives lead to tough people with unyeilding attitudes. The problem with the toughness is it needs to be tempered, or you'll always be the commando at the daycare. Anger can't be your only motivation. Don't know what else to add. Later.
    | Posted on 2005-10-24 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    78695

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.


    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry