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    dots Submission Name: untitled love poemdots
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    Author: L.i.
    ASL Info:    20ish/m/aynu realm
    Elite Ratio:    4.25 - 55/42/8
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 375
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 997



    Description:
       This actually a true story. I went to San Diego, California and saw an old friend of mine. And she has changed since the last time I saw here. So I was attracked to her, but the thing is I don't live in Cali.


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    dotsuntitled love poemdots
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    I’m sitting here confused
    And not knowing what to do
    Battling my thoughts
    And physical attractions to you
    In you presence, I could turn away
    And my eyes still stare
    Even in your absence
    I think of you so much it feels like you’re still here
    Yes I know that I probably shouldn’t tell you this
    But I wonder how it would feel
    For you and I to kiss
    They say seize the opportunity
    And this opportunity I don’t want to miss
    At the same time I don’t want a sad situation
    But that of bliss
    Your body glows when I see you walk
    Your sweet voice puts me in a trance
    When I hear you talk
    I want to bond with you
    But soon I’ll be home
    And my home isn’t here
    But in a totally different time zone
    I should have told you when I saw you
    But for some reason I had to hesitate
    I know it’s better now or never
    But now seems like it’s too late




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      welll it was good i have to ay because in this poem you try to put your feelings acros to this woman .. so it is a good way to free yourself..
    well hope you can tell her what you feel and at least be honest with her and yourself..
    take care
    peace and love
    and have a nice day
    thanks for shairng
    and if you have time please take a lookk to my writings ..
    Victor
    | Posted on 2006-03-21 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]
      im sittin here bouncing to the Minstrel shows video
    "Lovin it" wonder where the h-e double hockey sticks is the rest of your verse's. im feelin cheated come on get with it. this is a song in the makin with out a doubt kid...
    alright back to what you wrote...
    1.dope-phat-tight-
    2.water delivery
    3.emotion inducing injections

    Nice formula for a emotional revisit for me...
    i give you 3 1/2 mic's because your missin a chorus & a couple verse's. give L.L. back his mic...
    the write was tight dont ask me why im thinkin of a curtis mayfield beat, that would be sweet...
    i see i've been missin out... have 2 get at you at a later date...

    hope your fam's safe.....an any one else's that had family involved...

    one.... keep luvin to write....
    | Posted on 2005-10-29 00:00:00 | by elohimswork | [ Reply to This ]
      is this wat you really want? think about what you really want from this new emotion. if u decide to take it further remember it would be hard to get back your original friendship. what would u perfer? all i have to say is. listen to your heart.

    suzi

    ps: by the way it was a good read
    | Posted on 2005-10-28 00:00:00 | by sushi wok | [ Reply to This ]
      This write I liked
    Do not feel just because you may leave without telling her your feelings that you will never tell her

    You can call her
    You can revisit
    Remember it takes time for a relationship to develop
    In this case thou you have to realize you were friends first so its even harder
    Remain positive
    Positivity is the key

    Take Care
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-10-25 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      BEAUTIFUL! truely truely beautifu...thats what i'm talking about right there. It was very touching and many people can relate to it. Do you and the girl go out now? lol anyways it made my day and thanks for posting another wonderful poem. Keep up the good work.
    Much Luv and Support,
    Danni
    | Posted on 2005-10-25 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so honest and a very moving poem. How sincere your feelings have been expressed in this poem. I must say this situation you are in is a real bummer. I would think it would be very hard to have a romantic relationship with someone that you couldnt be with or see very often. But then again, stranger things have happened and maybe it would work out and eventually the two of you could be together. I do like how this was written. It was kinda like arguing with yourself while expressing your feelings about her at the same time. The only thing I would suggest is to give this poem some sort of title. I just feel a poem should have a title that expresses the poem. Anyway, this is a nice write. Take care!

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-10-25 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      i love this.. it was so touching. I have had a similar problem with my friend. he hadnt seen me for awhile then he did and fell for me. and he lived far away.. only he confessed his love. I felt the same for him but we both decided to stay as friends so as not to complicate our lives at the time. i also like the way you worded it all. it was very well stated

    ~*~amber~*~
    | Posted on 2005-10-25 00:00:00 | by rocknpoetrychik | [ Reply to This ]



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