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    dots Submission Name: Candy Applesdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 180
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 693
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1058



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       Just tell me what you think...if you want all the little inside things explained I will but you need to try and figure it out. Think outside the box man.


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    dotsCandy Applesdots
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    red starfish and shiny red things
    I didn't know then I loved you
    the future of us seemed just as promising as my past
    I was raped at nine
    but I gave you a chance
    and there's less pain with time

    you were worth it
    you were worth it
    a risk I'm glad I took
    you were worth it

    overly emotional, well you took me to a place that I didn't care
    a place laced with cocaine
    I didn't know then it was love
    it seemed just to close to an addiction

    it was worth it
    it was worth it
    I could of died
    it was worth it

    sick and coughing I drank the whole bottle
    tripping hard with my reflection in the bathroom
    they told me that it ate holes in my brain
    12 hours later and I suppose that I was in love
    just dizzy from the after math

    it was worth it
    it was worth it
    only a few hours I thought I was never coming back
    it was worth it




    Submitted on 2005-10-25 08:49:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i know you know it wasn't worth it. holes in your brain for some guy. [censored]. that is some crazy ass [censored]. i think i'm totally disgusted. i think i'm gonna go break something. wait . . . nah i'm over it. yeah . . . that is a pretty sucky ass depressing emotinal type thingy you've captured in some weird sort of a haze type thingy which would be state a person would be in if they had a lot of holes in their brains. good write.
    | Posted on 2005-10-29 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      This was very sad. I liked the small stanzas that came after the larger ones. i don't really understand everything in the 1st stanza but i guess i would if i new you but thats okay you dont have to explain it. i think i get the other two stanzas though. greta write. :)
    | Posted on 2005-10-26 00:00:00 | by _Joeysgirl_ | [ Reply to This ]
      Who is this about? Corey? Thats what I thought in the beginning...but it sort of sounds like it could be about nathan also...
    I liked this poem. I don't need you to explain everything...I understand it.
    This was an awesome poem...it flowed really well...
    So very good job.

    farewell...
    jessie
    | Posted on 2005-10-26 00:00:00 | by jessie thomas | [ Reply to This ]


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