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    dots Submission Name: Bleachdots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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        This was sorta inspired by my sister Raivn and how her relationship with this guy goes. It is like what happened to her and well I don't know...it sounds like a punk song to me...like maybe Garbage or something.

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    I cut my hair for you
    it was lovely
    now your're ugly
    this is simply an attempt at insane
    don't worry I'll recover

    I broke my cherry on you
    it was lovely
    now your ugly
    it was an attempt at pain
    now I wash the blood from my covers

    I'll bleach my hair
    I'll shampoo the sheets
    they are lovely
    your so ugly
    but don't worry only I can see

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      nice kinda odd but good none the less...bleach...thats the name of a nirvana song or album isnt it? i only had nevermind but yeah nirvana kilss...rock on
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by Master Bates | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this piece, it sounds like a lot of people I know, they'll do anything for just one person, and they don't really even love them.
    | Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by Draigon | [ Reply to This ]
      I really am that sad, aren't I? Me and jessie have the best present ever for your birthday. You're going to love us all to pieces. This is great. It makes me sad. I'm trying to stay away from him, but he keeps trying to pull me back in. I mentioned meeting this guy this weekend to him (and I didn't mention that he has a girlfriend) and he's all like, "Who's this cool guy you were talking about?" and following me around, and coming to talk to me on all of our breaks. I'm just like, "God, leave me alone!" I love that part about cutting my hair for him. It's the damn truth.
    | Posted on 2005-10-31 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah i cut my hair off recently too i don't know why. but it's growing back. i thought it wouldn't. but it is growing back in nicely. no i didn't shave it. losing your virginity is something everyone goes through at some point . . . i goes a few don't . . . but some have the luck of actually sharing it with someone who really appreciates them and some don't. the blood thing was a good touch.
    | Posted on 2005-10-29 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this a lot. I like the repitition of the line 'it was lovely
    now your're ugly' It does sound a lot like the relationship between Tony and Raivn. So very good job descibing that.
    Over all I must say that I loved this poem. It was very well written.
    Oh and guess what? I dyed my hair..mabangs really...they are purple again.

    | Posted on 2005-10-26 00:00:00 | by jessie thomas | [ Reply to This ]

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