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    dots Submission Name: Lostdots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 44
    Class/Type: Prose/Death
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       I had a dream that I was helping lost souls to release this realm and travel on. Interesting.


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    Lost Spirit

    Your soul
    not damaged
    only bruised....

    A tatoo, or
    if you will....

    As time goes
    soul stays

    Free 2 fly
    or continue
    to roam

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      Chill. Amazing, even your stuff about death, is inspirational; now that takes mad skill! Of course, I've a diferent view on death than most anyways. I don't see it as dark, bleak; and filled with suffering and misery. More like you, I see it as a release from life. A gift, our reward for serving our purpose. Our bodys are what hold our souls captive, and it is in death that we are freed. Of, course that's just my take. But it beets burning eternally, right? Thanx, for a piece of beauty in a world filled with such ugliness.
    | Posted on 2007-05-25 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a lovely poem. How interesting this is that you dreamed of something like this. Death is a mystery to us all and I hope there is a better place to find when I die. This prose is nicely written and I really like the style you use. It gives a sort of free feeling as I read it. Hopefully death will be a freeing experience but I dont want to find out too soon haha! Very nicely written and comforting to read. Take care.

    | Posted on 2005-11-04 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      This reminds me of a letter telling a lost love to come home all is forgiven or a man that means a lot has been hurt in a relationship and one is opening their arms and offering refuge.
    | Posted on 2005-10-27 00:00:00 | by AlabamaFarmGirl | [ Reply to This ]
      As time goes
    soul stays

    -this has a flowing structure to it, as a dream, you know, fragmented and pieced together. like it.
    | Posted on 2005-10-25 00:00:00 | by childs | [ Reply to This ]
      The shepherdess of the lost soul community. This could be a full time job for you, but you will need a very big crook, as there are many many lost souls walking this earth.

    Another insightful and inspirational write from you.
    | Posted on 2005-10-25 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      That was cool. I never have dreams like that. My dreams are alwayz stupid, and everyone always dies (dont ask). Well... anywayz this was a really cool poem. I thought the format was good and the wording was perfect. I really liked this part
    Your soul
    not damaged
    only bruised...
    because it kinda lets people know that your not really to the point of no return. ya know, what I mean??? Yeah well... Good job. it was a really nice write.
    | Posted on 2005-10-25 00:00:00 | by Drea | [ Reply to This ]
      I love poems that are inspired by dreams, they are so cool. I like this one, the format of the writing itself was interesting, almost as if you're trying to show us what happened by the way the poem was set up. Hmmm, well, I like, good job.
    | Posted on 2005-10-25 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]

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