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The Man and the Beast

Author: Kierkegaard
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The Man and the Beast

“Where am I?” asked the man.
“Your worst nightmare,” replied the beast.
“How did I end up here?”
“You led a trite and meaningless life, filled with pain and destruction towards others.”
“So I’m being punished.”
“Yes, you will endure an eternity’s worth of grueling torture, and inexpressible pain.”
“So you mean there’s no chance of me ever getting out of here?”
“No, unfortunately for you, there’s not.”
“Well then what’s the point of having a place like this?”
“It serves to punish those who go against the very basic principals and morals of humanity on Earth. It serves as an example of what not to do for those who come after your time.”
“But how can it serve as an example, if many people on Earth don’t even believe in it’s existence?”
“Well, I suppose they get the short end of the stick. Everybody who listens goes to an eternity of joy and bliss.”
“So what you’re saying is that everybody spends an eternity at one place or the other?”
“That’s correct.”
“Then why bother having a place like this at all? If it’s supposed to punish the wicked, then why make them stay here for eternity?”
“I don’t think I follow.”
“Think of it this way, the whole point of punishment is to prevent whatever crime or wrongdoing from happening again, correct?”
“Well, I guess that makes sense.”
“This is why we have people go to jail for varying amounts of time, so that depending on their crime, they spend an appropriate time in prison to prevent them from making the same mistake again.”
“I guess so, but what does that have to with us?”
“In a place such as this where the choices are eternal bliss or eternal sorrow, either way, the person will never commit the wrongs again. They will never go back to Earth, thus never getting the chance to do wrong ever again. So why even have a place where punishment leads to nothing, where torture has no outcome? What’s the point?”
”I already told you, the wrongdoers act as an example of what not to do. They tell all others what’s right and what’s wrong. Those who choose not to believe in this place will perish in our flames.”
“So you punish those who believe different from yourself? You torture those who have different viewpoints on life?
“Yes, I suppose we do.”
“Then you’re just as bad as the people on Earth! You punish those who are different from yourselves, then punish people who punish people who are different from themselves!”
“Hmm, I never really thought about that.”
With that, the place of doom and destruction disappeared. The beast and the man vanished, leaving a vast void of emptiness that would lay vacant for all eternity.

Submitted on 2005-10-25 14:16:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Wow that was deffently a different kind of wrighting ive never read something so wow is all i can really say. I mean you didnt really say what sin the man commited to end up in hell so that would work to b added in someware but good job keep it up
| Posted on 2005-10-25 00:00:00 | by Phil Eads | [ Reply to This ]
  that was quite interesting. I assume the beast is the devil and the man is a sinner. he has gone to hell and has summed up your viewpoints in his dialogue with the devil.

I think it was beautifully done, but if you ever get the chance...I would like to know, just where that sinner of a man went to after hell went *poof*. you left me hanging at the end, like you said your views and then you were done and cut the story off right there. so if ever you get the chance, give the tale of the sinner after hell went *poof*

other than this point I admire your work, very thought out and entertaining and lets not forget, quite original.

be wary of biased criticisms that may come with this work though, Christians may berate this just because it's not what the Bible says, so if you get any biased critiques; ignore them because this is a great piece.
| Posted on 2005-10-25 00:00:00 | by iHaveNoName323 | [ Reply to This ]

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