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Author: Star
ASL Info:    15 F WI
Elite Ratio:    2.69 - 125 /127 /42
Words: 62
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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I was just jotting stuff down


The darkness is
closing in on my
last few seconds of life.
Sensing that it is so
close to the
end, I try to remember
how I got here.
Why is it that I have no
feeling in my body?
The cold is creeping in.
The light is finally fading to black.
No more....


Submitted on 2005-10-25 16:12:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  thats pretty cool, from what ive read of yours you seem to be into short yet clear writing. its kind of like "answer all my questions before the silence" which is pretty cool. but the title and ending does kinda throw it off and i kinda didnt like that but the rest was pretty good.

| Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]
  I like it, but I don't. It made me hurt in empathy. I only dislike the way it made me feel, however I like it for that very same reason. The imagery was excellent. I felt it. Very cool. Keep it up!

| Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by Sandolphon | [ Reply to This ]
  like Raven said, it is short, but it gets the point across. i like it because its full of detail and emotion. keep it up and ill keep reading.
| Posted on 2006-01-06 00:00:00 | by kession | [ Reply to This ]

Really good poem. I like how it creates a picture in the mind. It may be short, but gets a point across. Can't wait to read your next one.

| Posted on 2005-10-27 00:00:00 | by Silent_Tears | [ Reply to This ]

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