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    dots Submission Name: Oasis Sandsdots

    Author: Kierkegaard
    Elite Ratio:    5.39 - 20/14/9
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsOasis Sandsdots

    Deep within the desert heat
    A man traverses his defeat
    For he runs from beast unseen
    It lives within his fervent dream

    His chauvinistic manner knows
    No limitation as it grows
    'Cruel fate come take me by the hand!'
    'Guide me out from hungry sands!'

    Oasis views from out his eyes
    As the sun beats down his cries
    Fleeing from his earthly beast
    His actions, tractions, come to cease

    'Desisting manner set me free!'
    'Let me up so I can see!'
    'This fascination of your soul'
    'Grows deeper than this tempest hole!'

    Alas this suffocating place
    Devours his untimely face
    His being becomes drawn within
    His own dry and cracking skin

    Submitted on 2005-10-25 22:08:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this,
    The mind of a thirsty mad man.

    Life is a mirage at times.

    Not much to say here except that I do like it.
    Are u sure you haven't been on this forum before?
    Your writes remind me of some that I have seen here before.

    What does the symbols and numbers mean. They do have a pattern though.

    Respect and Admiration

    Wisdom Seeker
    | Posted on 2005-10-25 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]

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