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Submission Name: !confusion! dots

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Author:	fallen_angel384
ASL Info:	17/Female/uk
Elite Ratio:	3.26 - 59/87/22
Words:	83

Class/Type:	Poetry/The pain inside
Total Views:	239
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I know this is pretty confusing even to me but its just what i was thinking @ the time i couldn't concentrate on anything till i wrote so i dont really care what people put about this as it helped me lol

izzi x

!confusion! dots

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As i sit here alone,
the thoughts in my head,
will battle and fight,
till one ends up dead.

Why do i feel,
this way inside??
Why do i feel,
this need to hide??

Why can't i fight my own battles?
stand up strong and tall,
Why am i always paranoid,
and waiting for myself to fall?

I've come to a decision,
i want this confusion to end,
so i'm going to stop this behaviour,
and fight till the end.

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  I decided to comment on this poem because it was not about cutting at last. It's not that I avoid them, but I've read some of yours now, and I find them too common to say anything more useful to you than 'try to be more original'. I think you'd be a good poet, but maybe it's time to try your skills at another subject. This poem was not very original either, but it was not too common. The flow was simple but maybe just fine. I don't think the poem is confusing but maybe that's because I can relate to it. The last stanza was very powerful, and I hope you'll do what you said in there. Don't give up and try to stop.

DZ
| Posted on 2006-03-11 00:00:00 | by Darth Zeus | [ Reply to This ]
  I don't get it to me it meant something but i can't know if you don't know. It was a good poem though so keep up the good work.

~~Danni~~
| Posted on 2005-11-17 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]
  Why do i feel,
this way inside??
Why do i feel,
this need to hide??

reminds me of a poem i wrote. kinda. everyone asks this. its good that you are fighting your depression. keep it up
| Posted on 2005-10-26 00:00:00 | by shattered_dream | [ Reply to This ]
  That's it girl, stand up and fight this depression! Don't let life get you down. Expressed your feelings inside very well.
| Posted on 2005-10-26 00:00:00 | by AlabamaFarmGirl | [ Reply to This ]
  I quite liked it. I didn't find the piece confusing at all. It just seemed to describe all too well - confusion. That doesn't make it confusing. Am I confusing you? lol.
The flow was pretty good and I liked how I could relate to it. Good job.
| Posted on 2005-10-26 00:00:00 | by DeepDreamer2008 | [ Reply to This ]
  It is a little confusing, but only because it jumps all over the place. but hey the title is confusion... HELLO!lol. I get it though. I feel the same way sometimes. but then again im a little psychotic, so you might want to go get checked.lol. just kidding. anywayz, i think this was a good peice.
| Posted on 2005-10-26 00:00:00 | by Drea | [ Reply to This ]
  seems like the fog of confusion has been cleared by your conviction to fight it out...
'you wont take me, you wont break me, i'll fight you under blood red skies...' (judas priest) this poem reminded me of these words...
| Posted on 2005-10-26 00:00:00 | by jassal | [ Reply to This ]
  none too subtle, but as long as it helped you, i think that's the best test of poetry. :-)
| Posted on 2005-10-26 00:00:00 | by AptPupilofLife2 | [ Reply to This ]

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