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    dots Submission Name: Colddots
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    Author: xmangaXfreakx
    ASL Info:    13/f/IL
    Elite Ratio:    2.77 - 31/30/22
    Words: 286
    Class/Type: Story/Misc
    Total Views: 848
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       Hi. I wrote this last night. Not really sure why though lol.


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    dotsColddots
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    Oh no. Mom's home. I can hear her car door's muffled slam in the garage. I have to find a hiding place. Upstairs? Too easy. Oh, I just don't know. I can tell when she's had a bad day,and this is one of them. Bad days for her mean that no one else can have a good day. She slams things around and the sound of her hurts our ears. I take my little sister, Katie, upstairs with me. I grab her homework so maybe we can make her happy by finishing it. "Erin, go get the MAIL!" she screams. "Okay." I run out into the evening, nothing but pitch blackness in front of me. It's freezing, and I'm in a T-shirt and jeans, but oddly enough, the cold isn't quite so cold anymore. It's just a welcome escape from what's inside that house. That house is so full of goo dtimes, but the bad ones make me want to just run, so far from that house, that I look like just a speck to it. I probably already do. I can't take this. I sit down on the grass, knees pulled close to my chest, and cry. No one is outside in this blackness, and I'm glad. I just want this night to envelop me and take me away with it. The cold to wrap it's long, tendrils around my being. Mom must have saught on that I was outside. "You're gonna get a cold out here! Get inside!" she said. "Okay." I don't say much of anything on bad days. But don't judge me or my family on our bad days. Because you have them. Everyone does. And I know, that they are cold.




    Submitted on 2005-10-26 06:11:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well its a bit too short to be a story...i hope you are planning to add to it..sure we all have bad very cold days.. i guess thats just a part of families..but i am curious what happens next?..i am familiar with the feeling you have described..now take it further
    | Posted on 2005-10-27 00:00:00 | by jassal | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought it was a very interesting story. It reminds me of myself and my mom. only I really do get cold. This was a really good story.

    Drea
    | Posted on 2005-10-26 00:00:00 | by Drea | [ Reply to This ]
      oops sorry! a few spelling mistakes.

    *good times

    *caught

    and a few more.

    I hope you like this story. I found it very easy to write last night. Well, bye now!
    | Posted on 2005-10-26 00:00:00 | by xmangaXfreakx | [ Reply to This ]


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