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    dots Submission Name: Passion for a Lover (Finale)dots

    Author: poet09
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 157/162/122
    Words: 284
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       This is the final part in this love making series so please tell me what you think of it and how could this have ended better if you think that it needs to be revised with some modifications.

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    dotsPassion for a Lover (Finale)dots

    We're finally together and
    so much we've shared
    To end this love who
    would dare try

    Erotic positions that have
    taken us a to a place of
    no return

    The juices from your body that
    I am constistantly licking from head
    to toe

    The back or the front either
    way we have seem to fulfill
    our sexual desires

    Every inch of you and me
    giving each other what they want
    Never ceasing to give in even after the eruption is through

    Passion that I have for you will be forever more
    Our love goes farther than the eye can see

    Passionate love please stay with me!!

    No, there's more:

    Screwing you until you can't
    scream anymore
    The rocking of the bed
    until day break

    We're moving so fast
    and at an unmatched rate
    Can be it's time for me
    to explode with


    It's has erupted

    You are asking me to give you more
    As you wish I go faster with your
    head banging the head board...

    Faster and faster with each passing push of me in you
    You say you want it harder
    but I don't want to hurt your delicates
    That I lick so softly after we're done

    You are moaning to a point where it is as
    loud as your sexual screams

    Will you come and be with me forever
    cause if you do you will never leave extitacy

    Passionate lover this is from my heart to yours will you plz accept me to stay with you forever more??!!

    Submitted on 2005-10-26 06:32:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      ya asl?
    it was good :)
    very good i personaly would have been more subliminal about it but
    a good stait forward aproch its very hot
    | Posted on 2005-10-30 00:00:00 | by bloodied_angel | [ Reply to This ]
      >_>...omg xD. it was hot. in lack of better wording.

    Screwing you until you can't
    scream anymore
    The rocking of the bed
    until day break

    ::teh cough:: that was.. >_>.. anyway. awesome write. lol
    | Posted on 2005-10-26 00:00:00 | by shattered_dream | [ Reply to This ]

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