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    dots Submission Name: oh how my heart wondersdots
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    Author: sushi wok
    ASL Info:    19/f/australia
    Elite Ratio:    4.12 - 64/67/13
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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       it is true. oh how my heart wonders.


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    Oh how my heart wonders
    Do you love me?
    I do not think so.
    You love another.
    While I sit and wait,
    I wonder

    Oh how my heart wonders.
    Do you think of me?
    I do not think so.
    Your mind is on another,
    While mine is on you.
    I wonder.

    Oh how my heart wonders.
    And wonders it shall.
    That is all itíll do,
    Forever with you.




    Submitted on 2005-10-26 06:38:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Aww that made me sad. It reminded me of someone. It is very well written. I love it. My favorite part is the end:

    "That is all itíll do,
    Forever with you."

    Yeah... I know what you mean. I would give you advice or say something wise, but I got nothing. Ive been "wondering" for quite some time. I hope everything works out for you. Great job

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2005-12-17 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      Doth the heart know.

    Dose the heart know of its past
    of its long lost loves

    Dose the heart know of its truths
    or of its passions and ambitions for the future.

    Dose the heart know of true happiness.
    As I sit and ponder on this, a queery.

    With the loss and the pain of loves to come
    and loves to go. Will the journeys end conclude with true happiness or will it begin a new.

    With hopefull ambitions the heart presses on with strong passions for a bright and hopefull future.

    End

    I am glad that I had a chance to look at your poem. I am impressed by the skill and the grace in which it was crafted.
    | Posted on 2005-11-27 00:00:00 | by Unicrom | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this...it most definitely emphasises the wondering and has a questioning tone when i read it...i guess it could read as either a big heartache and if that is where it was written from then i feel your sadness and can empathise...and/or from a bemusement point of view which is still sad but it also has a shake your head type of a feeling to it...i guess what i mean is a wonderment like when you shake your head at someones way and think oh my i wonder about you sometimes...lol i hope all that makes sense...and then it is nicely concluded with all that you are left to do is wonder and thats all you will ever do about this person as will your heart...very nicely written :)

    Oh how my heart wonders.
    And wonders it shall.
    That is all itíll do,
    Forever with you.
    | Posted on 2005-11-17 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this
    It was very sad
    AllI can say is I have read a lot of your poems and your newer poems express a more positive and happy outlook on life
    I am happy that writing is healping you heal from what ails you
    Keep writing

    I really like your poetry
    Take Care
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-11-08 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Questions of love...we've all had them...this is what this work makes me think of reading it...I found myself recently asking similar questions with a girl who is now 1300 miles away while we were together.
    Well written and takes you in wanting to continue...otherwords good flow of words.
    ~Alan
    | Posted on 2005-10-26 00:00:00 | by MidnghtScorpion | [ Reply to This ]


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