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    dots Submission Name: why you lied to me? verse 3dots
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    Author: unknown soldier
    ASL Info:    17/kenner, La (N.O)
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 1348/1346/203
    Words: 376
    Class/Type: Lyrics/What you did
    Total Views: 929
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2241



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       unknown soldier is the one whose hurt. anonimous is just pissed and protective of his other half. oh yeah, i don't mean to offend any females with this. i was just very pissed at this chick when i wrote this.


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    dotswhy you lied to me? verse 3dots
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    (unknown soldier)
    Yo I knew we wasnít dating
    but you were implicating
    That I meant a little more
    Iíd a left your ass before
    If I knew what was in store
    And that it would all end up like this
    Itís real, and this whole deal
    has been sealed with a kiss
    To another niggaís lips
    Nothing woulda happened between us
    If I knew you was chasing dicks
    On the bock
    Every time you see a new one
    You act like Paris Hilton
    ďThatís hotĒ and itís really not
    You act like a slut
    When I first saw
    it felt like a few punches to the gut
    Then I gathered my composure
    No words were said
    What we had was dead, it was over
    My fire inside, it just dwindled
    Until writing these lines made it rekindle
    I thought that with me, you were pretty honest
    Til I saw a cat in your mouth
    more than your orthodontist
    And between us, you started building borders
    Iím writing this song
    while youíre watching Law and Order
    ď__Ē, you were like a dick cancer
    and that ainít cool
    And donít answer
    you shouldnít talk with your mouth full

    (anonimous)
    The outfitís almost done
    Iím adding on the final threads
    ď__Ē always trying to run
    and hop on all these niggaís heads
    Giving head on her knees,
    or in the bed, but with that said
    Itís outta my system
    some hoes need to just learn how to listen
    And stop working they jaws
    Thatís one of the reasons between us, weíre raging a personal war
    Not even you know how many dicks you saw
    Cuz u close your eyes, open wide
    And niggas put they shit inside
    and take you for a little ride
    Troyís ok now, you just hurt his pride
    And thatís gonna heal any day now
    No matter how hard you tried
    BITCH!!!

    Why you lied to me?
    Though I try to hide, feelings deep inside
    Fooling with my mind, now I think itís time
    For me to just rewind, and get up out this bind
    No more fucking lies, cuz Romeo just died
    Why you lied to me?




    Submitted on 2005-10-26 16:30:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That sucks hon. I'm sorry that happened. I'm suprised that I liked this, cuz it's not usually my favorite kind of writing. But all the technical stuff was good, and the feeling was there, which is why I liked it. Ttyl hon. Hannah
    | Posted on 2005-11-16 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]
      so yeah i thought that this one was just as good if not better than the rest of them. When did you come up with the idea of using "anonimous" in your rights. See theirs a question. newaym this was realy good and agian im sorry thatt someone treated you like that.

    ~Gena~
    | Posted on 2005-10-29 00:00:00 | by luvy | [ Reply to This ]
      this is good too. each "person" has his own personality and yet you connected them well. the flow was pretty good...:-P I kept up ok. there's alot of emotion behind it. o and BTW it's good that u put in ur descrip that u weren't trying to be sexist:-P lol I got alot from this one tho...nice write.
    | Posted on 2005-10-27 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow that was long. But was a good write. The flow was great. I usually dont read long writes. But the flow kept me reading to the end. Keep up the great work. I felt you was very hurt. I hope things are better for you now. I can relate to someone I love lying to me.
    It hurts alot. Well keep writing. God bless
    | Posted on 2005-10-26 00:00:00 | by Poetic Cure | [ Reply to This ]


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