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    dots Submission Name: Halloweendots
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    Author: Poetic Cure
    ASL Info:    49.f.mn
    Elite Ratio:    2.97 - 313/137/33
    Words: 211
    Class/Type: Misc/Comedy
    Total Views: 237
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1528



    Description:
       Wanted to write somthing about Halloween.


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    dotsHalloweendots
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    Halloween a fool’s holiday.
    People dressing funny to party.
    Pretending to be somebody else.
    Hiding behind a hideous costume,
    consuming mindless brews.

    Children walking or tripping,
    pushing to get a treat or somthing.
    Parents standing back watching,
    their cute little beasties reaching.

    Door openers... greetings the same.
    Goodies in hand and smile on face.
    Some in costumes scaring hebe jebes
    out of the babies who begin to scream.

    Others hiding behind closed drapes,
    spying from the darkness agape.
    Nosy enough to watch the kayos,
    but to cheap to participate.

    Pumpkins with gruesome grins
    and bright flaming eyes with in.
    Flickering eerie shadows about,
    threatening to blow out.

    Witches stupidly stuck in a tree.
    Hoping no pass a byre sees
    red embarrassed face of thee.

    Skeletons showing off,
    bone dancing in the buff.
    Hanging and swinging for all to see.
    Hungrily moving to the breeze.

    Scarecrows with fresh straw insides.
    Poles down the back keeping them upright.
    Fearing black raven to land and beak,
    knowing body and mind just to weak.

    Halloween, what a trip for the dead.
    I for one rather spend Halloween in bed.
    Undercover with flashlight, paper and pen,
    wondering what fear to begin.






    Submitted on 2005-10-26 18:35:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I read both this poem and your kids version "treat" and I guess I prefer this one, which is from an adults point of view. I like how you laced it with humor. The flow was a little rough, but I really liked the message. Nice write.
    | Posted on 2005-11-07 00:00:00 | by oixi | [ Reply to This ]
      'children walking or tripping pushing to get a treat or something"
    hah! so true! and funny!
    um, there are a few grammar/spelling mistakes, but otherwise, it's funny and true as hell!


    ( but i still luved it as a little kid!)

    ~CinnamonT~
    | Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by Avril54 | [ Reply to This ]
      I get it. I think it's kinda funny if you look at it...but that's just me. But yea like unknown solider said you looked at it from a different perpective. It was a good read.
    ~~Danni~~
    | Posted on 2005-10-30 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah this one confused me too. i think this is just a very deep look at halloween from a different perspective. kids love it. religious fanatics hate it. it just seems like you're slightly fascintated by it and kinda picked it apart to take a look inside of it. it was good though.
    | Posted on 2005-10-27 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      umm. I kinda dont get it either. I think I ge tit better tahn Phil does but not by very much. Is it about writting a story for halloween instead of ogin out. or am I completly headed int he wrong direction??
    | Posted on 2005-10-26 00:00:00 | by Drea | [ Reply to This ]
      What the heck? I dont understand this at all but im a kid so i like trick or treating and i dont know who wouldnt i mean even adults go out but the words are great and everything
    | Posted on 2005-10-26 00:00:00 | by Phil Eads | [ Reply to This ]



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