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    dots Submission Name: Endless Namelessdots
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    Author: srcastic1
    ASL Info:    18/F/IA
    Elite Ratio:    6.29 - 96/97/28
    Words: 248
    Class/Type: Prose/Death
    Total Views: 609
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    Description:
       This is another piece of writing in a collection devoted to Kurt Cobain. It's a narrative surrounding the possible events and thoughts he might have had surrounding his suicide(?). The title is the same as a Nirvana song. I hope you guys aren't too put off by the length, it's actually relatively interesting and quite graphic toward the end, so let me know what you think.


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    dotsEndless Namelessdots
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    It is April 2nd. A haggard young man sits in his garage. He is numb. Numb for once in his life. And he can’t recognize this hand in front of his eyes scrawling letters shakily onto parchment. His thoughts are moving faster than his brain can handle, despite its genius. “The fans, Courtney, Frances, I can’t…but I can’t do it anymore and it hurts and the gun, the gun is right here and waiting, and they’ll just send me back, and it’ll be hell, worse than this.” The hand stops writing and reaches upward to brush away the tears stranded upon the man’s sallow cheeks. It is so cold, but not for long. The note is carefully placed beside him on the floor. It will be easy to find. The shotgun replaces parchment and is clutched sympathetically to his chest like an understanding best friend, the ultimate answer, the pain to end all pain. He closes the eyes and shuts out every light with one jolt of the trigger. “I love you Fra…” The blast severs his infant’s name before it cuts quickly through brain and skull to the other side. He is slumped upon a chair, lifeless. A bloody marionette in ironic comparison to his live self. He is a damnedstupidfool, member of the music death club so popular these days. He is a coward, a waste at the top of his career, a morbid surprise for an electrician three days later. He is a legend.




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      Who is this Cobain you all talking about?
    No seriously, who is he, and why do you done care so much about the we he die?

    -would've been good work but for the reference and/or the parody.
    | Posted on 2005-11-03 00:00:00 | by ARK | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, my Cobain fanatic friend read this, and nearly ended our friendship, as well as my life...
    according to her.. and this is a direct quote...

    ".. the fact that that article completely insulted the most important person in my life...
    courtney hired a hitman to make it look like a suicide and being rich and all the investigators didn't care too much about it and filed it as a suicide anyway..."

    blah blah blah... whatever... personally I don't think that whatever love one holds for a dead druggie singer who one never knew is not as important as the love we hold for the living, and shouldn't make us angry with our friends...lol.. but i guess i should tell her that and not you!... lol... some people take this issue way to seriously, i mean, if Cobain had never picked up a guitar in his life, would any stranger have given a damn if he put a bullet through his brain>>?? or bothered to blame it on a hitman...??

    Lol.. Sorry, for that little rant.. personally , I have no attachments to Cobain, though he is a legend, and I thought that your writing was awesome. My favourite image was this one...
    "A bloody marionette in ironic comparison to his live self.."
    especially because of the unusual use of the word Marionette, instead of the more common puppet, besides the fact that it is such a true image...
    yeah,,.. lol.. sorry about the rant, i was just annoyed by my friends comments...
    Trying to put yourself into a mind so filled iwth turmoil, agony, desperation and confusion, is not an wasy task, yet you manged to do pretty darn good...
    ciao bella

    PEnny
    | Posted on 2005-10-27 00:00:00 | by barefootangel | [ Reply to This ]
      well this one is a bit different from any i have read so far, i love Cobain but not ahy where near as much as you do, one thing though the whole hit man idea i think that is just crap he killed himself and we all know it, because if you think about it if she would have waited longer he would have had more money so why kill him so soon? but that's just my idea so please don't take that as a attack against you, other then that you were right this is a little long but very intersting, i also liked the ending too, just because of how graphic it was, i could see the whole thing playing out in my head as i read the piece, well sweet right

    ~liz~
    | Posted on 2005-10-27 00:00:00 | by Fadingperson | [ Reply to This ]


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