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    dots Submission Name: Do You Love Him?dots
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    Author: srcastic1
    ASL Info:    18/F/IA
    Elite Ratio:    6.29 - 96/97/28
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Legend
    Total Views: 602
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 889



    Description:
       This is yet another piece of writing from my research project involving Kurt Cobain. It was a great project really. Any research paper that involves presenting research in whatever way you want is pretty damned awesome and appeals to someone with a scatterbrained, creativity-seeking frame of mind like myself. Anyway, if you didn't figure it out, these are quotes with a rhymed poem in between. In the project, the quote lettering was noticeably larger to emphasize the aspect of Cobain that people saw before anything else, so pretend it looks like that.


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    dotsDo You Love Him?dots
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    “He was an asshole.”-Courtney Love reading Cobain’s suicide note
    He was tired of existing.
    “He was unhappy.”-Danny Goldberg, former manager
    He was fed up with living a lie.
    “He was a druggie.”-the media
    Pain drove him to using.
    “He alienated himself from everyone.”-bandmates
    He avoided letting those close watch him die.
    “He saved rock and roll…”
    His audience depressed him.
    “But he couldn’t save himself.”-journalists
    His fanbase held rapists and scum.
    “He seemed like a great father.”-close friends
    His daughter was all that brought sense
    “He was a nice young man, very quiet.”-aquaintences
    So he held pain in his guts til he fumbled and lost life to a gun.
    “He was an asshole. Everyone here say it. Say he’s an asshole for leaving, then say that you love him.”-Love




    Submitted on 2005-10-26 23:26:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hmmm... my best girlfriend is a Cobain fanatic, with your permission, i might send this to her.

    Well, this was definitely interestingly written, however, when i look at the actual poem that you have written in between, I feel that it could be alittle better... some of the pieces of your poetry, son't tie in with the quote above it at all, though most do, very well... my favourite associations are:

    “He alienated himself from everyone.”-bandmates
    He avoided letting those close watch him die.

    and:

    “He was a nice young man, very quiet.”-aquaintences
    So he held pain in his guts til he fumbled and lost life to a gun.

    “He seemed like a great father.”-close friends
    His daughter was all that brought sense


    the part that is the most confusing, is this part:

    “He saved rock and roll…”
    His audience depressed him.
    “But he couldn’t save himself.”-journalists
    His fanbase held rapists and scum.

    I got a little lost here, but maybe I'm just not to bright...

    here are your actual words, minus the quotes:


    He was tired of existing.

    He was fed up with living a lie.

    Pain drove him to using.

    He avoided letting those close watch him die.

    His audience depressed him.

    His fanbase held rapists and scum.


    His daughter was all that brought sense

    So he held pain in his guts til he fumbled and lost life to a gun


    Though there is rhyme, the rythm is not very smooth, some of the lines are very long, and others are much shorter, so the rythm is really thrown off, and when the rythm is off, so is the ryhme...
    But it was interesting, and something creative amd new, if you don't care about ryhme and rythm ,it's all good, i just think that this awesome idea could be a little more finely tuned

    ciao bella

    PEnny
    .
    Oh, I think that this is spelled like this...aquaintences - "aquaintances" , but even that looks wrong !
    | Posted on 2005-10-27 00:00:00 | by barefootangel | [ Reply to This ]


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