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Dragon Quill


Author: lastdragon
ASL Info:    19/F/MO
Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 38 /43 /13
Words: 99
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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this i came up w/ while sittiing in the car waitting 4 mom to get out of the store. theres no particular reason for its existance


Dragon Quill



A sleek scale fallen from,Then
A shape known to me from,There

It's form is light in my hand
It's burden weighs heavy on my heart

A gift from the gods?
A curse from the ghouls?

It's life blood, supressed feelings
It's ink, passionate flames

A rare beauty in it's own strenght
Forming glass castles in firey strokes

It's my most treasured friend
It's my most terrifying feind

A pen bringing out my best jewels
A pen revealing my very worst jealousies

I think I'll keep it
I think I'll toss it




Submitted on 2005-10-27 06:29:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  'Duality of man'.lol. I like the parallel of opposites, it is unique. RyukiTZR is right, the first stanza is off, its like you started writing in one form, and then switched your style.
| Posted on 2005-11-03 00:00:00 | by Kane Martyr | [ Reply to This ]
  this was very well written. I liked it alot! I like how you balanced the goods and bads instead of focusing on one aspect of it. nice write:)
| Posted on 2005-10-29 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
  this is tight. it's like the quill has its own powers. and u can't decide wether or not to toss it because it brings out the good in you. but it frightens you because of the evil it can release as well. this was like a balance of good and evil and the quill would make the balance go back and forth like a see-saw.
| Posted on 2005-10-27 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  This is cool... just kinda dun understand the first stanza. But, its great as it gives an impression of a passion for the pen and the writings it had gone through. Good write. (I'm not a good commenter today so yea.)
| Posted on 2005-10-27 00:00:00 | by RyukiTZR | [ Reply to This ]


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