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    dots Submission Name: black deathdots

    Author: papalegba
    ASL Info:    45/male/schenectady ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.78 - 52/42/28
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsblack deathdots

    there is a feeling
    of the deepest emotion
    it happend with an election
    and then
    we found nothing but death
    from the storms
    to the attacks
    now nothing but death
    have we forgoten the peace
    and the twothousand that rode into heavens gate
    have we forgotten the reason for the black war
    there is no reason to hide
    behind the great monster
    that rose from florida
    to kill for the self
    and not for humankind
    but for greed
    we all know the smerk that went around the world
    september 11 2001
    and it will just get worse
    people wake up
    the black death is upon us
    and the end is near
    help us oh lord

    Submitted on 2005-10-27 10:37:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You did a great job of expressing yourself, and the truth of it cannot be ignored. Though not one of my favorite pieces, this has earned my respect.
    | Posted on 2005-11-06 00:00:00 | by Zabriel | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't know yet if i really like this poem. It may be growing on me though. I do however love your wording and realness. Is this a poem? it feels like a poem sometimes but somewhere in the middle i got lost. Altogether though i think it is good
    | Posted on 2005-10-28 00:00:00 | by soul full | [ Reply to This ]

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