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    dots Submission Name: Guides To Elven Heritagedots
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    Author: shoggoth
    ASL Info:    24/m/croatia
    Elite Ratio:    4.74 - 80/84/30
    Words: 264
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Tell me if the end (that is - the whole meaning of the poem) is a bit unclear, so I could fix it. thx


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    dotsGuides To Elven Heritagedots
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    We travelled side by side
    with inclining mountains
    Resting in their foothills
    and drinking from their fountains

    Hunting for the food of kings
    we spoiled our humble tongues
    Sheltered by the ancient trees
    we purified our lungs

    We followed silent rivers
    engulfed in hues of teal
    To some what is utopia,
    to us it was but real

    Signs and symbols forged our path
    to our main objective
    We were to find a treasure
    that would change our whole perspective

    And so we strayed into the forest
    covering our trails
    So that anyone that follows
    wanders off and fails

    After weeks or months of rambling
    and following the signs
    Our host and guide lead us no more
    twisting in the lines

    Without the guides there was no way
    to reach the goal we set
    Our quest would grow perennial,
    thus a closure it has met

    We spoiled our souls a little longer
    our host still offered more
    The forest grew and flourished
    in a nature's great folklore

    The days of pleasure went on fast
    the time had come to part
    Not a word, but deep inside
    this parting broke the heart

    Returning to our humble homes
    we remembered our lost goal
    And pondering in retrospective
    we realized it all in whole

    While we wandered through the woods
    we took joy from its existence
    Seeking for the elven gold
    guided by our own persistance

    While the guides began to fade
    and we withdrew our treasure quest
    Already, without knowing,
    we have opened the bequeathed chest




    Submitted on 2005-10-27 11:14:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a well written poem. It is an inspiring read and it would seem to me that the treasure was realizing how rich you are to enjoy nature and all that it has to offer in the company of good friends. Your journey together created memories that you will hold close to your heart forever and that is truly priceless. I love to take a walk through the woods and near the water with people I care about. Just talking and spending time together enjoying the time and the beauty of the scenery. I dunno if I got your interpretation right, but this is what it means to me. And again, this is a great poem. Very nicely written! Take care!

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-10-27 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      I got that the treasure they thought was gold was actually friendship.
    -HaldirLives
    P.S. It could be just me, but as I was reading it I saw about a hundred parallels to Lord of the Rings. Were they intentional? Probably not, but hey.
    | Posted on 2005-10-27 00:00:00 | by HaldirLives | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a good poem.
    an interesting meaning to it all, if I got it correctly that is.
    That these people were searching for the treasure of the elves, gold I am guessing.
    But by looking for it they found that the forest was that treasure.
    That is what I got from it, but there is a really good chance I am wrong.

    well, im just ganna keep talking like i'm right

    I love nature & I think that its beauty is beyond any treasure you could ever have.
    well I hope that I didnt get it too wrong & if I did it wasnt because of your writting, I am just not good at depicting the writters meaning.
    thank you for the very enjoyable read.
    Take care
    ~jennifer
    | Posted on 2005-10-27 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]
      Ok, you pretty much got it, even the friendship part (although, when I wrote it I wanted that treasure to be the elven nature and their forest in the harmony thay left it, but I guess that the travellers' friendship could also pass :) ) ...
    and yes, there are some parallels, but not a hundred ;) thank you all 4 commenting
    | Posted on 2005-10-28 00:00:00 | by shoggoth | [ Reply to This ]


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