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    dots Submission Name: Reveal Yourselfdots
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    Author: Cassius
    ASL Info:    26/M/USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.56 - 130/177/60
    Words: 181
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 270
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1080



    Description:
       I've got a lot of things going through my head these days... feeling like I need to be more for other people and less for myself... I just feel lost and unsure of what even to say when I pray.... at work had a few lines from this pop into my head.


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    dotsReveal Yourselfdots
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    Reveal yourself to me oh Lord
    I'm lying in this place where darkness is all around
    It envelops me killing all the light

    Where are you
    Where are you
    I can hear You calling me, but I don't know which way to run

    I am completely blind and growing cold
    I have to find a way out of this place
    Reveal yourself Lord

    Tear down the walls that are closing me in
    The more they grow the weaker I become
    I fear the day it all comes crashing down

    Lord have mercy on me
    I'm on hands and knees
    Please have mercy

    I think my eyes are open but they don't see
    Strike a match in the distance so I can find the way
    Grab my hand and pull me in

    I can no longer speak
    The air has left my lungs, and there is no more to take
    Anything more I can not say

    but this, reveal yourself Lord
    This can't be where you want me
    Reveal yourself this very day

    Amen




    Submitted on 2005-10-27 13:14:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey sorry its me again. Just read your description. and i know exactly what you mean. hang in there! I found recently that writing does help me get things off my chest. sometimes i even find my answers, from myself.
    | Posted on 2005-10-28 00:00:00 | by soul full | [ Reply to This ]
      well, i love that you are writing about Our Savior, but i can;t say that the poem/prayer/song, is really any good. Not that it's bad either. Don't get me wrong, i think, from what i see, that with a little more effort you could do something great, can't wait to see that.
    | Posted on 2005-10-28 00:00:00 | by soul full | [ Reply to This ]
      This was alright, though it doesn't really seem to be anything really. At first it seemed like a poem but at the end it turned into something, and the end it was just a prayer. The flow was alright, but you should really take the very end off.
    | Posted on 2005-10-27 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]



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