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    dots Submission Name: What Could Not Bedots

    Author: AlabamaFarmGirl
    ASL Info:    50/F/Alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 518/333/26
    Words: 184
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
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    dotsWhat Could Not Bedots

    As she turned and seen him watching her
    Her heart skipped a bit or two
    She had not seen him for quite awhile
    He is telling her she is still a pretty gal
    She says, Well thank you kind sir
    Feeling as a magnet drawn to him
    She starts to mingle among the crowd
    Trying to fit in and be one of them
    Filling her glass, she had a few
    Feeling kind of fuzzing, not knowing what to do
    The music was getting pretty loud
    She grabs her purse and goes to leave
    He steps up behind her, asking her to dance
    Her heart beats fast hardly able to breath
    All he is asking is one night of romance
    She starts to cry, he drys her eyes
    Telling her he will be by her side
    Will not ask for more, just to be her friend
    Both of them fighting deeper feelings within
    For she was promised to another
    And he did not want to just be another bother
    From each other they could not stay
    So still are friends to this very day

    Submitted on 2005-10-27 15:55:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      One thing I'll give to wild parties and loud music they always seem to help people connect, even strangers can find a comfort zone. Yes, filling the glass sometimes breaks the barrier as well, but the FUZZY feelings will never stay in line with reason. They seem to tell lies whenever its tipsy time. Love is best left to the strong at heart instead of the strongly drunk.
    I think we need another wild party, how about you?
    Very cute, but does it still hurt when you think of him?
    | Posted on 2006-01-05 00:00:00 | by Clayton | [ Reply to This ]
      This one is a very expressive and heartfelt piece of work, The deep emotion within your words is compelling and your words a very powerful message to all. This is a sad and loving poem all together a truely beautiful write and an enjoyable read please keep up the great writing. You are a very unique and brilliant Poet and your peotry is beautiful. This will be another Fav of mine, A wonderful expression of love and emotions of pain.
    | Posted on 2005-12-23 00:00:00 | by LadyMustang | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this write
    It shows someone the man who saw the inner beauty of a woman and when he saw that he couldnt be her soulmate
    He sided with becoming best friends instead
    This is a very powerful message
    To me
    Friends and Family
    are actually the most important relationship of all
    They help us to grow and become better people preparing us for our journey that still lies ahead

    I Hope and Pray that this thanksgiving is the best one you ever had
    You and your Family deserve it
    Happy Thanksgiving
    And may God keep you close
    Take Care
    | Posted on 2005-11-22 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this one it was very true for me and many others as well. Fate has a way of letting you see the truth that you never seen before. And as for love well it is a hard emotion to control and often times we do not control it vey well bt in this ead it was controled with great care.
    | Posted on 2005-11-09 00:00:00 | by ThatWasOnceMe | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with all of the above. I have been there and I felt the emotion in me as my mind wound it's way back to four years ago.

    This was very compelling and certainly left an impression on me.

    The sweetest love is such a love
    That is highest by degree
    The sweetest love is such a love
    That can never ever be
    | Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      Sometimes love has to be unrequited but it doesn't lessen the feeling and to have an eternal friend is just as well sometimes!
    Beautiful, descriptive piece!
    Love,Peace,Joy! tif
    | Posted on 2005-10-31 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a good poem! I really like the story you tell with your words in this one. A love from the past, not seen in a while, but yet the feelings that were once shared were never really lost. And now they come face to face again and he shows her his interest. She is nervous and somewhat excited by this but knowing she is committed to another she makes a noble and respectable decision to decline. Must have been a hard decision for the both of them to refrain as the words here indicate they both still had an attraction. But how wonderful the ending is to know that this encounter rekindled not romance but a long standing friendship. It is always a blessing when two people who were once intimate can just be friends. This is very touching and well written! Take care!

    | Posted on 2005-10-28 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Those special romantic times that grip at our heart and keep us in that moment forever. Meeting up again with someone who has a piece of your heart.. and realizing those feelings are still there.
    The good part about this is.. although they both know they can no longer "be".. the friendship still remains.
    | Posted on 2005-10-28 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      hi thanx for your recent comments this was a great write but i am not how would i say into the mushy stuff but still give credit to a good love story and i do write the odd one from time to time geat piece
    thanx again
    | Posted on 2005-10-28 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a sad poem and it hits home with me and i can relate especially of late anyways enough of me i love the flow and the rhythem to the poem keep up the good work
    | Posted on 2005-10-27 00:00:00 | by darkonesgirl | [ Reply to This ]
      bummer! I have been in that same way. I wish we could go back to that old saying: Love the one your with...
    Well anyway I thought this was good and keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2005-10-27 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]

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