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    dots Submission Name: I Feel Itdots
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    Author: OrionsStorm
    ASL Info:    18/M/VA
    Elite Ratio:    2.74 - 180/247/76
    Words: 181
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 1091
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    Bytes: 1052



    Description:
       this is dedicated to Kriss


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    dotsI Feel Itdots
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    You have pain,
    we all will feel it
    You bleed out,
    we will all go anemic
    When you cry,
    the earth cries with you
    You are enigmatic
    the world can feel it

    I feel it, the pain is great
    I feel it and I see the blood
    I feel it and I cry with you
    I feel it, I feel it,
    It will get better, it always does
    I can feel it, I can feel it

    Your heart aches,
    the world aches with you
    you lost love,
    the world lost it with you
    You scream,
    the world listens

    I feel it, the ache is terrible
    I feel it, the loss is too much
    I feel it, and I scream with you,
    I feel it, I feel it
    It'll get better, it always does
    I feel it, I feel it

    The fights and the hate,
    the crying and the wait,
    the loss and the ache,
    I feel it too,
    I'll make it better,
    I'll mend the damage,
    cuz I feel it too





    Submitted on 2005-10-27 16:38:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i really like it and how you say you know what you are feeling and how you feel about everything thats happening. it shows you know you can relate.
    | Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]
      Aww Storm, you made me cry. Thanks for dedicating it mostly to me. Aww, I don't know what to say. It was so beautifuly written, and everything was just so truthful, and you just had to go and make me cry! =p
    "The fights and the hate,
    the crying and the wait,
    the loss and the ache"
    Those were my favorite lines...dunno why though. Guess they just stood out to me the most. Great write Storm!

    ~Kriss
    | Posted on 2005-10-29 00:00:00 | by juss_kriss | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this. I agree with master mind, it really does sound like a song. great now i'll have it in my head..lol. seriously though i can relate to it whole heartedly. who can't? glad u put it out there
    | Posted on 2005-10-28 00:00:00 | by soul full | [ Reply to This ]
      ok at first i didnt get you. i was like "how do you go anemic?" but i read it again and now i understand. i liked his especially the part about you scream the world listens.
    | Posted on 2005-10-27 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
      not a bad write, for some reason i could hear it as a song in my head, but it sounded like the kind of song that would get stuck in some ones head and they would do anything to get it out. dont take this in a bad way, it did make me smile after i red it,...
    | Posted on 2005-10-27 00:00:00 | by master mind | [ Reply to This ]


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