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    dots Submission Name: Chance To Say Goodbyedots
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    Author: withblindedeyez
    ASL Info:    19/m/nc
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 83/121/58
    Words: 210
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 955
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    Description:
       My friends and my cuz lost they life just trying to have fun, i will never forget them, R.I.P. Noah, Elli, and A.J.


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    dotsChance To Say Goodbyedots
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    The whole world fell silence with
    The news, The car flipped and broken
    Like a toy thatís been reused, Our friends
    Stuck inside, if we only knew, you two left your
    Mark on the world like a black and blue bruise
    The memories over and over replay
    These memories will never fade.

    In that moment when you die
    Something twist and turn and cried inside
    Just trying to have fun, the cost was your lives
    I never got a chance to say goodbye
    This lifeís gone in the blink of a eye.

    To many long nights, to many
    Times having to fight this fight
    This life, was never meant to be filled
    The pills helped ease the pain, these
    Pills took you away, Rest in Peace your
    Name will never fade.

    In that moment when you die
    Something twisted and turned and cried inside
    Just trying to have fun, the cost was your lives
    I never got a chance to say goodbye
    This lifeís gone in the blink of a eye.

    Whyíd you have to die
    Itís gone in the blink of an eye
    We never got the chance to say goodbye,
    I canít believe we didnít get a chance to
    Say goodbye.




    Submitted on 2005-10-27 20:44:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I could really feel your pain in this. a very heartfelt write, your emotions were conveyed brilliantly. "This life's gone in the blink of an eye" so sad yet so true.

    Be strong and peaceful,
    Jermaine.
    | Posted on 2005-10-28 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm sorry for your loss... I felt the pain and sadness in your words... I too lost some friends rescently so know what your feeling...Now we have their memories engraved in our hearts... Take care and thank you for sharing this with us... Desi
    | Posted on 2005-10-27 00:00:00 | by Desi | [ Reply to This ]
      Absolutely fantastic, I loved it.
    "In that moment when you die
    Something twist and turn and cried inside
    Just trying to have fun, the cost was your lives
    I never got a chance to say goodbye
    This lifeís gone in the blink of a eye." this part is my favourite, it really hits home how quickly a life can be over and to not be able to say goodbye would be devastating.
    | Posted on 2005-10-27 00:00:00 | by babytinkerbelle | [ Reply to This ]


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