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    dots Submission Name: Sexy Moody Sleepydots
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    Author: toyysruss
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 494/336/134
    Words: 246
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 1275
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    Bytes: 1909



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       i really dont know=at one time i thought i did


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    dotsSexy Moody Sleepydots
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    Those eyes
    Are for the bedroom only
    The feeling radiates towards
    Like a bright light into mine
    And I am blinded by
    Those sexy eyes

    Don't give me that look
    Tingles it creates
    And what we are both going to create
    Because of
    Those eyes


    Daggers are thrown
    If looks could kill
    This housefull would be dead
    And here comes
    The little creations
    Skippidy hop hop
    Kicking at chins
    Tripping over this,falling over that
    A pile here

    She looks
    And were not in the bedroom anymore
    The lights grown dim
    Eyelids half squinting
    And thier still focused on me
    Always have been
    No matter what room were in
    Maybe the house will stand
    As I sit and wait..........
    ...........Yawn


    Stretching
    It's been a long one
    Her chins are bruised
    Little one's laughter everywere
    Slowly fading
    Remembering
    Laughter and yelling
    I swim thru it all
    To my den
    Thru the piles and toys
    Thru the daggers and lust
    That finally bring me here
    To this couch

    I'm finally there
    Eyes getting heavy
    I'm lying,but i'm not
    By myself
    Slowly sinking
    Faint great noises
    Comming thru the door to
    Eyes going south
    Remembering
    Trying not too
    Peace
    Everlasting?
    As i'm drifting,I realize
    That even behind the door
    Slowly closing mine...
    That I'm still being watched
    By those lovely eyes
    And I couldn't go out a better way
    Any better than them
    Sexy Moody Sleepy Eyes
    Snoreeeeeeeeeeeeee............







    Submitted on 2005-10-28 00:53:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      well done,
    you really portayed the feelings well & relayed them to your reader.
    Love can not be put into words, but you really brought out some of the emotions here.

    there is not much to say,
    I really like this, the emotions are strong as the love is
    take care
    ~jenn
    | Posted on 2005-11-11 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]
      Well done, I liek it although I found it a bit hard to get into at the start. You are truly in love and I am happy for you because there is not enough love in this world just a lot of hate and lust.

    Well done,

    Lynda
    | Posted on 2005-11-04 00:00:00 | by babytinkerbelle | [ Reply to This ]
      Not too bad at all, it gets its point across, although you seem to get off track a couple of times.

    Very interesting way of telling a story, almost one person to another, with the reader just an interloper.

    I liked it, the different looks of the eyes...plenty of them!

    Well done

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-10-28 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, this really is a true tale of real love. you cant know love until youve hated each other. chris rock once said "you dont truly know love until youve sat there with a box of rat poison and the only thing stopping you from killing that [censored] is that episode of CSI when you realize they might actually find you" overall, its a good poem. i love how you show how much you really care about her. good write, makes me happy to see people truly in love :)
    | Posted on 2005-10-28 00:00:00 | by brokenroses | [ Reply to This ]
      This is strange because I thought it would be more about what actually happens in the bedroom and not the results of what went on lol... But all in all I enjoyed it much and I can tell that sometimes you get frustrated but hey you have a family and a good life you should be proud of with your lovely sexy eyed woman... Yet again this was a very nice poem and thanks again for your comment on mine Peace Mysterious
    | Posted on 2005-11-13 00:00:00 | by Mysterious Blue | [ Reply to This ]


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