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    dots Submission Name: rain is tears from angel eyesdots
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    Author: EEKS
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 647/1206/773
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       i dont know why that is the title.


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    dotsrain is tears from angel eyesdots
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    laugh
    and the world laughs with you
    cry
    and the world laughs at you
    a single tear falls from my eye,
    and makes it way down my cheek
    it rolls slowly down my face
    and falls upon the floor
    it sends an echo of unmatched silence
    sometimes i think i need a friend

    for those with friends crying is best done at night
    noone sees you
    and sometimes you can even lie to yourself
    and say there was something in your eye





    Submitted on 2005-10-28 09:37:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I really like the ending to this one. Because it expresses the subconscious thought that crying is weak. I think the beginning was very clever.
    | Posted on 2006-07-26 00:00:00 | by ollie_wicked | [ Reply to This ]
      This one is very beautiful and well written a little short but very good I like it alot. Not alot of people can express it the way you have.
    | Posted on 2005-11-04 00:00:00 | by LadyMustang | [ Reply to This ]
      i loved it even though yes it was short almost seems like somthing is missing from it the poem also seems to play with peoples emotions anyways keep up the good work
    | Posted on 2005-10-30 00:00:00 | by darkonesgirl | [ Reply to This ]


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