Description: what do you think of the I's? and I'm stuck on the title.. any suggestions?
AA -------------------------------------------
i scream as tears
stream down and pool
at my feet.
i dream as fears
seem to crowd
leaving me beat.
coping and hoping
turning the page
yelling with rage.
as i engage in war.
War with despair
complaining that life isn't fair.
not wanting to care.
Good thing it was a dream.
I awoke with my scream.
jumped to my feet.
To dance to the beat.
Ready steady and
capable of engaging
with he battles of the day.
Ready to say.
Hello, my name is Anna
and I'm an alcoholic.
I love how this gets fast and speeds into that ripper last line. very cool. and it definitely makes its point.... defeating an addiction is definitely a battle and it does kind of whirlwind down like the flow of this poem. The speed and flow in this makes me think of the downward spiral by Nine Inch Nails... not like the music on the album, just the title. Speaking of titles, I think it would be cool to have a more elusive title on this. Don't let us have an inkling of where you're heading so when we get to the end it hits twice as hard. good luck w/everything. jessica
I'm assuming parabola was bragging on my title skills. LOL... I helped her with one of hers. So, for AA...this popped into my head...let me know what you think..
Gateway Beyond Myself
Or something along those lines. Something to show that you are walking through a different door to go beyond one's resources and reach out for help. Does that make any sense? lol... So that just popped into my head (yeah I know, this statement is redundant)...I'll see what I can come up with for tomorrow. :)
Hi thank you for sharing this with us... I have a son with a drinking problem and I wrote a poem called "Addiction", if you would like to read it, it is posted here. It is truly a daily battle... The "I's" didn't bother me, but sure some could be left out... The title could be... Anna's Battle... or.. Hello, my Name is Anna.. .. Nicely done.. Desi
Submission Name: AA
