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    dots Submission Name: Right Nowdots
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    Author: OrenroccA
    ASL Info:    17/M/Virgina
    Elite Ratio:    2.38 - 29/38/18
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 501
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 339



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    dotsRight Nowdots
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    Can you her me calling?
    Can't you see my outstreched hand?
    Can you come save me again?

    Cause right now i'm calling out to you
    So won't you answer me
    Right now i'm reachingout to you
    so won't you hold my hand and never let go
    Right now I need you to save me




    Submitted on 2004-04-20 09:24:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hmmm i think their short for lyrics, but hey if you can make it atleast a 2min song then thats fine lol. I liked it its straight to the point but i think on the 1st like you might want to change "her".. into "hear"?... and on the 6th line reachingout should be separated. Other than that is fine and welcome to the site
    | Posted on 2004-04-20 00:00:00 | by Exodus Night Sky | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really good, i hope theres more cause it says lyrics and normally songs are longer this is pretty cool i think i'll go read it again, thanks for sharing
    ~*~Pryncess
    | Posted on 2004-04-20 00:00:00 | by PryncessVynom | [ Reply to This ]



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