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    dots Submission Name: As The Colors Bleeddots
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    Author: Black-Wall
    ASL Info:    19 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.81 - 60/85/48
    Words: 548
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Passion
    Total Views: 351
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 3042



    Description:
       Hmmm it speaks for itself. I wrote it in like five mins, so tell me what you think. Dont read it and leave "grrr" comment on it.


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    As The Colors Bleed

    :: Solo ::

    Crystal clear I see your eyes cutting through me in the fragmenting shimmer of the light.
    I feel my heart waiting for the touble ahead, and all my life I have seen the lights flashing.
    Someone told me to run away, dont look back, stray far away.

    As I reach down to feel the ice on the ground, the feeling opens my eyes.
    I could only say to you what has happened to me, I can only become what haunts me.
    Every day I pull the shovel out of the grave, I burry the people, I say fuck the world.
    I bandage my hands, I pass through the blood, and my thoughts begin to drown under suffering.

    I begin to drown.

    Grab onto my cold and broken hands, hold onto the ice that forms with in. As it begins to pull, say it will never happen again.
    The reflection of harmony is chased by a shard of my forgotten life. As the colors bleed.
    Grab onto the knife in hand, plunge it deep in. Twist the handle, run away, look back as your relfection fades.
    Grab my hand, Grab the end, distance it again.

    My hands shake, the chains I hold are slowly dragging me down into what I will never know. A vocalized misery.
    From the whimpering of your voice, to the screaming burrowing deep down inside of me.
    I pull harder on the nuse which climbs into the sky even higher, I see the sun start to fall back down.

    A tragic ending to something so beautiful, twas the last time I seen you so beautiful. I can see you now.
    Eyes cutting me down, my darling sin, open up and spread your wings, let me in.
    Wearing this burden on my heart I start to speak.

    Speak of the disease that haunts me, its like I am suffocating on your sight.
    Speak of the last reason, I held you so tight, you met my love with the twist of the handle that night.

    As the blade cuts me free from my dream, reality only seems to be what I have created. Death pained on red lips, your emerald eyes were the start of my demise. I begin to drown, I start down.

    Grab onto my cold and broken hands, hold onto the ice that forms with in. As it begins to pull, say it will never happen again.
    The reflection of harmony is chased by a shard of my forgotten life. As the colors bleed.
    Grab onto the knife in hand, plunge it deep in. Twist the handle, run away, look back as your relfection fades.
    Grab my hand, Grab the end, distance it again.

    :: Solo ::

    Now I see it was you that was haunting me, As the colors bleed.
    Watch the sky for me, watch and see the reflection of harmony, shatter and fade, into the cerulean end.
    Speak out, help me as I begin to drown.

    Grab onto my cold and broken hands
    As I start to pull, say it will never happen again.
    As the colors bleed.
    Grab my hand, Grab the end, distance it again.
    As the colors bleed.




    Submitted on 2005-10-29 13:40:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You know this could be a great song. The lyrics in some areas are very great in my opinion. If you intend for it to be a song try and make it shorter otherwise it will feel like a poem. Keep the things that really have an impact in your emotions.I can tell your writing expresses deep emotions, and you use originality to do that. I read over a couple of your works and I was very impressed.

    This was my favorite para
    Grab onto my cold and broken hands
    As I start to pull, say it will never happen again.
    As the colors bleed.
    Grab my hand, Grab the end, distance it again.
    As the colors bleed.

    They lines correspond with each other. And thats what songs are all about. Have a great day and keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by winterdove | [ Reply to This ]
      This is interesting and good considering you just sat down at wrote it. I interpret this as a poem of passion for someone but also of pain and suffering that this person has caused you. It seems like this person somehow betrayed you and all you want now is for them to come back and say it wont happen again. I am not sure. There is so much here in the way of what seems to be heartbreak and disappointment. At least that is what I get from the repeated reference to the knife. This is a good expression and I hope I am at least partially right with the interpretation. Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-10-29 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]



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