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    dots Submission Name: The Assistant Of Sufferingdots
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    Author: C. Starr
    ASL Info:    35/yesplz/State of denial
    Elite Ratio:    4.22 - 130/196/68
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       October 2005


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    dotsThe Assistant Of Sufferingdots
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    Devil horns.....
    Yellowed and cracked by infinite time.
    He is not a man but a creature who makes men commit his crimes.
    A face….
    Weathered by centuries of destroying others dreams.
    A face that is always there,
    But a face you never see.

    Deep dark red eyes.
    Sunken in and shallow….
    Some believe we celebrate his deeds on the day we call All Hallows.
    A dirty soul, blackened by greed.
    Always working to fulfill his needs.
    The feel of it....
    The pleasure he receives....
    From human suffering.




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      ok im depressed right now i thought i could read a dark piece to better my mood (i know that makes absolutely no sense!)

    well not bad for a "little poke at the devil piece and blame everything bad happening in the world on him" ha ha ha ok minus "and blame everything bad happening in the world on him" i threw that in for dramatic effect actually snotty effect, snotty drama? actually i do have to pick here from a theological perspective *priestly robes on again* geez the second time I had to do this in one day my goodness. ok to the line: "He is not a man but a creature who makes men commit his crimes." ok my problem with that is "makes" i do not subscribe the horned one as someone who makes anyone do anything. we have our own free will all the "devil" may do (provided he is not on vacation) is influence/inspire. now i know that is getting technical right down to semantics but give the fella a break people like to blame the devil for everything under the sun. i robbed a bank culprit, Satan! i killed my family the devil made me do it, i stubbed my toe guess what it is Lucifer’s fault! ok let's see what else we have here. and this "Weathered by centuries of destroying others dreams" i think people are widely known for doing such things to themselves. what else we have here: "The pleasure he receives...From human suffering." its kids and candy boo! ya know not witches lead by satan goin around rounding up little children and roasting them in ovens. that only happens in fairy tales and on TV. this is so funny its like the super Christian perspective of evil during an oooooo ahhhhh "evil" night. please you want to see evil incarnate look no further than the white house! now that's a real spooky mother effer there! a guy who thinks he talks to God and runs a country!! now that is a freaking horror story if i ever heard one. its not really a bad write even though I may have hammered this. it's like a parody, yet i don’t know if you were serious in this write. i have one where i jest too (a little) ha ha. hoping you were jesting all along and it got me a running my fingers over it. if that is the case well done then,

    ~mike

    | Posted on 2005-10-30 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
      Halloween sucks a bunch of kids begging for candy and grown ups wearing masks--what better time to rob a bank-I cant think of one--any-ha this was a little differnt from you --I kinda like it--the dark side of All Hallows-I can dig....I wrote one too --you'll see!
    LT
    | Posted on 2005-10-30 00:00:00 | by LameMansTerms | [ Reply to This ]


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