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    dots Submission Name: don't be cynicaldots

    Author: rhogue20
    ASL Info:    20/f/alberta
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 10/13/10
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
    Total Views: 815
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1501

       written sometime last february or march i think...
    but i've always liked it.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsdon't be cynicaldots

    all around
    ghosts lurking in the shadows
    what was once a dreamless sleep
    one thousand variations of everything that could be and everything that never will be
    so close yet so far
    like on the other side of a window
    ...that doesn't open

    all those pages, those musical notes
    are memories of a person
    i no longer am, that i have lost
    and there is no returning
    and there is nowhere to go
    and i am still, standing still
    frozen to this deserted place
    forgotten mistaken and unknown
    each day the sun rises and sets
    the clouds pass the rains fall

    the night is my peace
    like a tree - unmoving, watching, growing
    until the fire claims this soul
    and i am released unto the skies
    freedom to fly...but a dream
    and im watching the stars fade away
    with all their unfullfilled wishes
    because none of it was ever meant
    to be

    Submitted on 2005-10-29 14:15:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Beautiful work. Nice choice of words. The swift flow makes it interiging and interesting.The confusion it causes makes it even better to read
    | Posted on 2005-10-29 00:00:00 | by smartblond | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this poem, I really do! I don't think I've read a poem like this before, and it's interesting with great vocabulary. It's a little confusing but makes ense at the sma etime...yea I know, weird, but oh well. Good job.
    | Posted on 2005-10-29 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]

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