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    dots Submission Name: Shutting You Outdots
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    Author: Samuel Bielz
    ASL Info:    21/M/CA
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 151/182/46
    Words: 257
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Still debating whether to give this to the subject of interest. She has no idea i even like her. By the way, if you are erading this on this website..... its not for you.


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    dotsShutting You Outdots
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    Should I stop and play dead again?
    Or shold I keep living this life thats killing me?

    If I shut you out,
    Will you get out of my head?

    If I break our connection,
    Would my fascination for you stop growing?

    Are you so naive that you cant see it?
    Can you not see how Im falling for you?

    I have my angel, whom I love dearly.
    She is more than I deserve!

    Yet I can't even spend an hour or two with you,
    Without feeling overwhelmed by your mystery.

    The depth i see inside your eyes,
    And the mystery behind your smile.

    I wanna be the man she deserves,
    And give my whole heart to her.

    But how do I give it all to her,
    When everytime I think of you, I'm falling.

    You dont seem to know how I feel,
    Its probably better that way.

    But now i must cut you off, and shut you out,
    Its for my own good, and hers.

    She deserves my heart in its entire state,
    And I don't know how else to give it to her.

    I'm sorry Monica,
    I don't know what else to do.

    Please forgive me if this seems shallow,
    But i see no other way to be true.

    I find myself falling more for you,
    And I don't know what else to do.

    Im sorry, i'll miss your mystery.
    You are the most beautiful being I know.




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      wow sam there is alot of emotion in this peace. feelings of love and despiration and loyalty. all rolled into one. i like how displayed the inner conflict that you have between these two girls. in some ways this peice reminds me of me because i am always to blind or dumb to figure out when someone has feelings for me. either way i still wish i was the girl that was constantly on someones mind. and if i am constantly on someones mind than damn i really am that blind. lol anyway enough about me. i thought the peice came together really well. great job Sam i love it...take care huh and talk to you soon...Joy
    | Posted on 2005-10-30 00:00:00 | by sweet_rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      It is a beautiful expresion. I love the way you showed emotion, conflict and love and wrapped it up into a beautiful peace of art. I hope everything turns out good for you
    | Posted on 2005-10-29 00:00:00 | by smartblond | [ Reply to This ]
      I believe Poetry is a great way to vent the feelings that you are keeping bottled inside. I like this poem as it spoke to me, a friend of mine feels the same way as you do, about me and reading this has given me an insight into his mind what he thinks when ever I am around. Thank you for making it clear for me

    The depth i see inside your eyes,
    And the mystery behind your smile.

    I wanna be the man she deserves,
    And give my whole heart to her.

    Reminds me of a poem my friend wrote for me.

    Thank you

    Lynda
    | Posted on 2005-10-29 00:00:00 | by babytinkerbelle | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. A lot of emotion came through on this piece and that made it really good. I really enjoyed this write. At first I thought it was kind of choppy with the double question at the beginning, but then the piece came together. The feelings behind this poem are amazing. I know I wish I was the girl you couldn't get your mind off, but that is my situation right now. You wrote about your inner conflict and expressed it beautifully
    | Posted on 2005-10-29 00:00:00 | by Sweet as Sugar | [ Reply to This ]
      A tremendous amount of emotion you let out
    I think you have finally made your decision
    Hopefully this will take a lot of pain away from you

    Again Great write
    Take Care
    Ron


    If you get a chance please take a look at my poetry and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-10-29 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      A tremendous amount of emotion you let out
    I think you have finally made your decision
    Hopefully this will take a lot of pain away from you

    Again Great write
    Take Care
    Ron


    If you get a chance please take a look at my poetry and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-10-29 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      A tremendous amount of emotion you let out
    I think you have finally made your decision
    Hopefully this will take a lot of pain away from you

    Again Great write
    Take Care
    Ron


    If you get a chance please take a look at my poetry and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-10-29 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]



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