Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Awakedots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 32
    Class/Type: Prose/Happy
    Total Views: 828
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 285



    Description:
       No rhyming just flowing while I was drawing last night....Love, Peace, Joy to all!!!!


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsAwakedots
    -------------------------------------------


    Sleeping girl
    awake...
    for all the
    fog
    has lifted
    from your mountain...
    Awake to dreams
    reality
    Fields colored
    green, blue
    Gold...
    Alive Love
    embrace
    the valley
    of the
    Shadow...




    Submitted on 2004-04-20 10:03:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      I think I'm getting a feal for your stuff, can't quite explain it, but none the less i do. You capture darkness and shroud it in light, only to be unveiled by the interpreter if such an aquisition is wished. At least that's my 2 cents, but it's apenny for my thoughts' and now you've more than that.
    | Posted on 2006-03-25 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      this was really good...I loved the flow and the emotion. I agree that the imagery was awesome too. I really enjoyed this piece.
    ~Jaime Lee Pachétte~
    | Posted on 2004-04-20 00:00:00 | by darkened_soul | [ Reply to This ]
      your poem sounded like being in a valley..awakening to the sound of rain. I liked your poem. also gave the feel that a bird flew over head...
    | Posted on 2004-05-12 00:00:00 | by Vibrant | [ Reply to This ]
      Another minimalistic piece that has such wonderful word choices that is needs no more. I dislike pieces that are so embellished that they lose sight of the meaning and leave us scratching our heads saying, "huh?"....This is lyrical, descriptive and caused many emotions to peek at me. I certainly favor this style of writing and usually follow this form myself. NICE!
    | Posted on 2004-04-22 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      Thanks for the brief flight. I loved the view from my window seat. My tray table fell and hit me on the knees upon landing. I think i'll sue the airline company, not the pilot. Keep up the good work!
    | Posted on 2004-04-23 00:00:00 | by Interpolation | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    7923

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Love written by saartha
    Across the bed written by expiring_touch
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (3) written by endlessgame23
    To the Devil and Candle written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Shut Up written by annie0888
    The Poems Death written by Mepoduo
    mimicry written by expiring_touch
    Relativity written by poetotoe
    Records I written by Raphael
    Dream written by closetpoet
    phantom limbs written by expiring_touch
    Physician, Heal Thyself written by WriteSomething
    Birds of a Feather written by poetotoe
    Reliquary of Writ written by HisNameIsNoMore
    I, Plutarch written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Comme un lion en avril written by Outlaw
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth written by endlessgame23
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (2) written by endlessgame23
    Carry written by saartha
    Still Perfectly Flawed written by armand
    prison written by ShyOne
    Cover written by saartha
    Suffer The Children written by poetotoe
    untitled written by ShyOne
    Shi written by ShyOne
    winners circle written by ShyOne
    // Seasonal Song written by ShadowParadox
    When Sirens Whisper written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Journey written by endlessgame23
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (6) written by endlessgame23

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry