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    dots Submission Name: Awakedots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 32
    Class/Type: Prose/Happy
    Total Views: 836
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 285

       No rhyming just flowing while I was drawing last night....Love, Peace, Joy to all!!!!

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    Sleeping girl
    for all the
    has lifted
    from your mountain...
    Awake to dreams
    Fields colored
    green, blue
    Alive Love
    the valley
    of the

    Submitted on 2004-04-20 10:03:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think I'm getting a feal for your stuff, can't quite explain it, but none the less i do. You capture darkness and shroud it in light, only to be unveiled by the interpreter if such an aquisition is wished. At least that's my 2 cents, but it's apenny for my thoughts' and now you've more than that.
    | Posted on 2006-03-25 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      this was really good...I loved the flow and the emotion. I agree that the imagery was awesome too. I really enjoyed this piece.
    ~Jaime Lee Pachétte~
    | Posted on 2004-04-20 00:00:00 | by darkened_soul | [ Reply to This ]
      your poem sounded like being in a valley..awakening to the sound of rain. I liked your poem. also gave the feel that a bird flew over head...
    | Posted on 2004-05-12 00:00:00 | by Vibrant | [ Reply to This ]
      Another minimalistic piece that has such wonderful word choices that is needs no more. I dislike pieces that are so embellished that they lose sight of the meaning and leave us scratching our heads saying, "huh?"....This is lyrical, descriptive and caused many emotions to peek at me. I certainly favor this style of writing and usually follow this form myself. NICE!
    | Posted on 2004-04-22 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      Thanks for the brief flight. I loved the view from my window seat. My tray table fell and hit me on the knees upon landing. I think i'll sue the airline company, not the pilot. Keep up the good work!
    | Posted on 2004-04-23 00:00:00 | by Interpolation | [ Reply to This ]

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