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    dots Submission Name: Sorrowdots

    Author: Azure
    ASL Info:    14/F/BC
    Elite Ratio:    3.12 - 40/45/22
    Words: 34
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 1379
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       I wrote this a long time ago, but it seems to suit my life now, so...

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    Sorrow descends, weakening the body, the heart, the soul.
    It purges the mind of all brighter emotions.
    Ripping mercilessly through illusions of comfort
    And attacking the heart, leaving nothing but pain.

    Submitted on 2005-10-30 11:15:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this! This has such an honest message and great wording. I think I'm gonna have to add it to my favorites list!
    Good Job,
    | Posted on 2005-10-30 00:00:00 | by The Conqueror | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the fact that this poem is short, why go over the top using more words and elabarations, when you got exactly the right amount of emotion and depth in those four lines. Some poems need to be long and some need to be short, this one is fine short! Keep up the awesome work! Sarah
    | Posted on 2005-10-30 00:00:00 | by Raven5 | [ Reply to This ]
      The emotion is very raw. No offence, but it is way too short. I can see a great potential, all it needs is a little more time and some more effort.
    | Posted on 2005-10-30 00:00:00 | by ParanoidParadox | [ Reply to This ]
      Yea this is so very true. I'm sorry you're going through sorrow and i hope life gets better for you. You know what they say life is like a dick when it gets hard [censored] it. (yea i know not very age approprite but it's true.
    | Posted on 2005-10-30 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]

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