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Picture Perfect

Author: BleedingTears
ASL Info:    16/f/Neverland
Elite Ratio:    4.06 - 418 /289 /62
Words: 80
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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i hate lot of things i wish never happened.

Picture Perfect

Tears explain my emotions
The way minds are mixed-like many potions
I can't control my mind
Because I've left it all behind
Waiting for you to chase after me
But you can't even see that I'm trying to heal.
Just help me die
Please ask the question of my heart
Then I will be able to start,
My whole life over
If I could,
I would rewind and erase
Like a picture.
Mess up.

Submitted on 2005-10-30 14:33:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I wish that life was really like a picture. You could take it, develope it, look at its beauty, and then take anoter one. THAT would be nice wouldn't it?
Awesome write.


| Posted on 2007-10-09 00:00:00 | by Magger32 | [ Reply to This ]
  If only we could have multiple shots at life to make things perfect. Great poem, makes me wish that i could go back and change a few things... not that i hadnt wished this already, but still, the feelings resurfaced. Great read, thanks.
| Posted on 2006-10-03 00:00:00 | by Guermo | [ Reply to This ]
  Amazing...totally awesome. Especially the end, the single words are extremely powerful...welcome aboard, awesome peice to start your hopefully long adn prosperous journey on ES! 5 Stars!

| Posted on 2005-10-31 00:00:00 | by OrionsStorm | [ Reply to This ]

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