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    dots Submission Name: untitleddots

    Author: doanle10
    Elite Ratio:    1.99 - 5/7/3
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Sorry....my poems are not very good. I wasn't really into writing poems until now. So, i'm just starting out. Any tips would help.

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    Sitting alone in the darkness
    Four walls surrounding her
    No room to breathe
    The air is suffocating

    Shattered hopes and dreams
    Lay at her feet
    Each one
    A reminder of the failures in her life

    She wants to scream
    But nobody will hear her
    No one is listening
    To the poor soul
    Locked up in a life
    Full of regret and sorrow
    Anguish and remorse
    Fear and pain

    The walls are slowly caving in
    Slowly they crumble
    Taking their time
    To mock the poor little soul
    With nowhere to go
    Nowhere to hide
    From the demons that plague her

    She wants to get out
    Out of this life that has caused her so much pain
    There’s no way out
    Her destiny set;
    Her life an utter failure

    Submitted on 2005-10-30 15:11:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, are you watching me? This is a good poem, inmy opinion. WHY is she depressed, and I feel just like this when i get depressed. Man the poem feels like its ...haunting. Nice peice. Write more!
    | Posted on 2005-10-30 00:00:00 | by Reva Laine | [ Reply to This ]
      pretty deep and it kinda goes along with alot of stuff that i write, but keep up the writing.
    | Posted on 2005-10-30 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]

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