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    dots Submission Name: Birth, Life, and Deathdots

    Author: kaoriliveshere
    ASL Info:    19/F/USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.15 - 5/10/10
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       I was trying to describe all the sides of life, and existants on Earth.

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    dotsBirth, Life, and Deathdots

    A rose is a bulb.
    The grass is new
    A tree is blooming,
    And a caterpillar is born.

    A rose is young.
    The grass is short.
    A tree is growing,
    And a caterpillar is large.

    A rose is right before bloom.
    The sky is gray.
    A tree has bare branches,
    And a caterpillar is sleeping.

    A rose is bright red.
    The sky is brightening blue.
    The grass is green,
    And a caterpillar has its wings.

    A rose is dead and dry.
    The sky is midnight black.
    The ground is dirt brown,
    And a butterfly is dead.

    Submitted on 2005-10-30 17:14:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a good life in nature write. Simple yet rewarding.

    The only thing I would change is that you have the Caterpillar sleeping twice. lines 12 and 16. Line 16 would be better if you would create the change from Caterpillar to Butterfly.
    Maybe "A caterpillar has its wings"
    Just a thought.

    A walk through the changes of time and nature.
    Each reflects within the other.

    The cradle to grave so to speak.

    Nice little write.

    Respect and Admiration

    Wisdom Seeker
    | Posted on 2005-10-30 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]

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