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    dots Submission Name: A True Love Storydots
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    Author: HaldirLives
    Elite Ratio:    5.12 - 234/149/60
    Words: 518
    Class/Type: Story/Love
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       I'm not much of a mushy writer, so this isn't a mushy kind of story.


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    dotsA True Love Storydots
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         This is a story of two people in love. Neither of them was very attractive, because this is a real story. If they were both attractive, then they wouldn’t be in love – they would be infatuated. So, they were two unassuming, normal adults attending an average college, and they both had average grades. Neither of them had a family paying their way through college, and neither of them had an enormous amount of scholarships (scholarships are not awarded to the mediocre). In fact, they were both working to save money to pay off their student loans. But they were in love.
         The young man was twenty-two, five foot nine, and had a cowlick above his left eye. He had a dark tan from doing construction over the summer in a nearby town; but he was very thin, just like his father, and had little hope of building bulging muscles like the other guys. His lip was scarred and a little crooked, and his eyes were a little too close together. He had a square face with brown eyes and framed by light brown hair. His name was Daniel.
         The young woman was twenty-three, five foot seven, and had thick lenses in her glasses. She was pale and unathletic, preferring to lie in bed and read or watch TV. In fact, her only exercise involved walking to class. She was neither fat nor skinny, and swore to herself each day that she would get up and take a jog; but then she would sit down to eat, pick up a book, and sit there for the rest of the night. She thought her lips were a little too fat and her cheeks were a little too chubby, and that her hair was too dark and frizzy. Her name was Isabelle.
         At 12:30 they had a class together – Calculus. Despite the fact that they purposefully chose seats far from each other (they had both failed before), neither of them paid much attention in class. They spent their time texting each other on their cell phones and doodling in their notebooks. After class they would get coffee on University Drive and try to figure out what they missed in class. Then they would part ways until 5:00.
         Neither of them had enough money to take the other out to dinner, so they took turns assembling a dinner from the cafeteria food and serving it in their dorm. After that, they would either watch a movie or stay up and talk until 9:00, at which point one had to leave for their respective dorm.
         Isabelle graduated first and left for a job in Philadelphia. They kept in touch through letters for a while, but after Daniel moved, they lost contact. They both figured that if the other one really loved them, they would come to them. Unfortunately, that’s like telling everyone to stay put in case you get lost in the grocery store.




    Submitted on 2005-10-31 11:44:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a great story told from a matter of fact frame of mind. I like this because it is completly honest and down to earth. The love story does not have a happy ending but an honest one.

    I admire your write here. I think that people try to put a happy twist on to many writes when life is just not that exciting for everyone.

    Greatt Write and I won't even try to pick this apart. It is to perfectly real to even mess with.
    This I will fav

    Again Great write

    Respect and Admiration

    Wisdom Seeker
    | Posted on 2005-10-31 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]


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