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    dots Submission Name: Overlookeddots
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    Author: StevenJay
    ASL Info:    21, Male, Chicago
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 27/36/14
    Words: 189
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 638
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1095



    Description:
       A change of pace from the dark, poems that describe pain and suffering.


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    dotsOverlookeddots
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    Sometimes the wind will come and kiss the warmth and beauty that fills the air
    It will be blown to anyone and everyone who is there with open hearts,
    Sometimes the sun will set over the hills that roll for miles and miles
    The sky orange as sherbet as it eventually melts into the darkest part of the night,
    The night still alive full of the laughter and memories that so many of us share
    And some of us try to forget,
    Sometimes the ocean waves will cover you up and bury you beyond the seashells
    Where your soul and spirit will fly beyond the fullest moon and into the stars that shine above,
    Sometimes when silence fills the room and the mind races for words that will not come
    The most important words are missing for a reason,
    Remember the ocean air and summer sky
    Remember the places we have seen and the things we have done,
    For memories are forever priceless,
    And when the room is filled with silence soak up the moment and be thankful for the most beautiful thing in the world,
    Us.




    Submitted on 2005-10-31 14:34:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Enjoyed this read very much Steven,it spoke volumes of the beauty of life I love the line sometimes the sun will set over the hills and roll for miles and miles,sunsets always bring me pleasure I love looking at how they they never seem to look the same, anyway good work keep up the poems
    adnil
    | Posted on 2006-01-24 00:00:00 | by adnil | [ Reply to This ]
      I really enjoyed the beauty and truth of this wonderful piece! It wasn't a specific format but it spoke well and gave me a nice feeling.
    Great!
    Love,Peace,Joy! tif
    | Posted on 2005-10-31 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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