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    dots Submission Name: The "right" feelingdots

    Author: mon28
    ASL Info:    29 /F /Montana
    Elite Ratio:    6.14 - 176/59/14
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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        Yes this was a vent piece. I went to several stores with this guy, he was being very picky about a new tv. He dumped me a month later telling me that he did not get the "feeling" from me... you know the one you see in movies..."the one...type feeling" Emotional state while writing? I was surprised because I did not see it comming and I write to get things out. After I wrote this... I thought wow! I had never been able to describe anything like this. Oh and this is just the last part of the letter... if you need the whole thing I will send it as well.

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    dotsThe "right" feelingdots

    You will choose your next relationship like you will choose a plasma screen TV. When the time is right and you feel comfortable with spending that kind of money, and you see the perfect screen that you can't walk away from, you will reach for your checkbook and write the check. The receipt will not matter because in your mind it is the one. This decision was based on a feeling and the feeling felt good at the time. Remember that just because you committed the money and the thought into this decision that the TV may or may not live up to your expectations for it. Things like people have a tendency to fail and sometimes no matter how hard you try to prevent things, they still fall apart because the parts you did not see, were faulty. The image that invoked the feeling was there but will the substance that produced the image you wanted to see, be there as well?

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      Hey Mon

    We men are truly enigmas, even to ourselves. One day a women will find a way to finally determined what sort of package you are going to get when you start a relationship and she is going to be a very rich person.
    Until that discovery happens you women all have to wander around with you constantly scratching your heads hoping to discover the jackpot.

    'On On'

    | Posted on 2006-09-26 00:00:00 | by Ocker7290 | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree, this is quite an unusual way to go in describing why one "chooses" another in relationships. Very clever on your part. I can see the many similarities, thanks to your good eye and great way with words.
    It's when we are "emotional" that our best work comes out.
    I enjoyed reading this. It's good writing.. and a bit humorous also. Though, I'm sure it didn't feel so at the time of composing?
    Take care,
    | Posted on 2005-12-05 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      that is awesome! and what's with people thinking that he wrote this to you? were they not paying attention? whatever. seriously though, it's well written, and very insightful. i'm impressed :)
    | Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by treybur | [ Reply to This ]
      this guy i work with just spent $600 bucks on a tv. i don't think he has spent that much money on anything ever. he is not rich. he doesn't have money to be throwing around like that - but he said he "needed" the tv. it is weird how much importance some guys put on the size, shape, screen texture, etc., on tvs and how much of their hard worked money they are willing to throw down on it - which will eventually make them dumber anyway. just so you know - i like tvs . . . i'm trying to remember my point . . . oh yeah - i think what you were feeling is the commercialization of love. they advertise on tv how love is a diamond or a toilet bowl cleaner or whatever. and how you have to buy stuff to feel good - it's everywhere. so in this materialistic world people often confuse love with materials. when love is really something more spiritual and crazy then anything really - i guess to truely experience love is close to being like a god, hehe. anyway - your boyfriend was a deusch-bag (if that's how you spell deusch). good write.
    | Posted on 2005-11-13 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      hehe sry but I have to agree with a few of ur previous commenters this is almost ammusing in how cruel and pun-ish it is. This is very well written and you definatly did your own thing with it...I never thought of comparing a relationship or a person to a TV...yet some ppl do almost subconsiously in a way. This was a great write but I'm sorry that the guy you liked was extremely shallow.
    keep writing.
    | Posted on 2005-11-11 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      I have read this a couple of times. I think to compare a relationship to picking out a TV then the picture tube has gone out in the mind.
    His horizonal adjustment is now vertical.
    I assume that he wrote this to you.

    This is so wrong that it is somewhat funny.

    Well I like that you shared this with us.

    I have been married 25 yrs and If I ever compare my wife to TV or any other appliance then I would be unplugged and replaced.
    I am going to have to read this to the wife. HEE HEE

    Respect and Admiration

    | Posted on 2005-10-31 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good beginning.Truth and purity in the T.V. reference.with a little tooling you could turn this into a first class prose poetry piece.It becomes a little redundant about halfway through.You could mix in some other odd metaphors or go into a few different directions to keep it intriguing.
    | Posted on 2005-10-31 00:00:00 | by honus | [ Reply to This ]
      your b/f broke up with you through a letter? and he compared it to buying a tv?? what an a$$! how the hell can you compare a human to a tv? does that mean that he was looking at you as a possion and not a person, you know what i say, if he compares you to crap like tvs then he's not the "right one" but yeah i like this it is so true, hope your next relationship is better then the one you had.

    | Posted on 2005-10-31 00:00:00 | by Fadingperson | [ Reply to This ]
      Hee hee! Ummm...sorry for laughing but this is just too funny! I have never heard of comparing a relationship with a tv before and this write is most certainly original...so...yeay! I love to read original stuff and you got it here! I think this is well written and expressed. I guess I just laughed cause after reading your description and then this write it just struck me as funny. Guys are tough ones to figure out...probably because they are so bad at expressing their feelings! Sorry if you were hurt in all of this cause that aint funny. But reading this was great! And you are indeed right with what you have stated and compared to a tv! Take care.

    | Posted on 2005-10-31 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]

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