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    dots Submission Name: One of Youdots
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    Author: OrionsStorm
    ASL Info:    18/M/VA
    Elite Ratio:    2.74 - 180/247/76
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Angry
    Total Views: 727
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1281



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       got the idea from standing in the store talking to a bunch of preppy-popular ppl. They thought I was 'one of them'.


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    dotsOne of Youdots
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    I'm not one of you
    I wish you just knew
    I'm not one of you
    I don't flow the cool
    I'm not one of you,
    I'm not one of your tools
    I'm not one of you,
    I hate all of it
    I'm not one of you
    and all of the bullshit

    I'm not one of you,
    You think you know,
    the way that I am
    or my whole plan
    I'm not one of you,
    You don't seem to know
    I don't 'go with the flow'
    and I'm not one of you

    I'm not one of you,
    I'd rather that you go,
    I'm not one of you,
    all you say is 'so'
    I'm not one of you,
    I don't want any of you
    cuz I'm not one of you
    I'm not one of you,

    Look inside you'll see
    I'm not what
    you want me to be
    I feel no obligation
    I feel no discrimination

    I'm not one of you,
    You think you know,
    the way that I am
    or my whole plan
    I'm not one of you,
    You don't seem to know
    I don't 'go with the flow'
    and I'm not one of you




    Submitted on 2005-10-31 16:19:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was pretty good Storm. Not your best, but not your worst =p. Some parts seemed a bit to repetitive, but the message was shown clearly. I hate preppy populer people, they annoy me. Their mouths should all be duct taped shut. xD
    ~Kriss
    | Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by juss_kriss | [ Reply to This ]
      Awesome flow and rhyme, it went well with the topic for some strange reason...oh, well. Anyway, I can definately relate to this poem because I don't hang out with the preppy girls and stuff because I don't want to be considered one of them. Great write Storm.
    | Posted on 2005-10-31 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it and it goes but it seems like their is something missing. like its got the catchy you thinkyou know but there should be one long profound line too...like you think you know, but you dont.. what you though was a mirror is really a whole world reflecting in the light of your eyes... or something.. ok not like that since that sounds kinda stupid but you know.. one long line that people will really remember. i liked it though. nirvana fan? me and my pals dressed up like them today. i was kurt.. yeaaa
    | Posted on 2005-10-31 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
      umm... I dont know It was a little repetitive... dont cha think??? But I dont know there was something else wrong with it too, I just cant pin point what it was.
    | Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by Drea | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nice flow and rhyme scheme. The emotion is almost overly easy to read into. The repetition wasn't necessary in my opinion.
    | Posted on 2005-10-31 00:00:00 | by ParanoidParadox | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked it alot cause i sometimes relate but having to read "one of you" over and over again kind of got onemy nerve.you could have written that phrase alot less.But nevertheless i liked it alot.
    | Posted on 2005-11-08 00:00:00 | by _Dancing_Alone_ | [ Reply to This ]


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