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    Author: BleedingTears
    ASL Info:    16/f/Neverland
    Elite Ratio:    4.06 - 418/289/62
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       words and words about two people but yah...ill except any comment. thnx


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    Why can't this silence inside me be broken?
    Why is it hurting me so hard?
    So I stand here jealous for this.
    Slowly falling in this suicide.
    Slowly falling backwards in time.
    Swallowing the knives of this killer
    But your glowing ghost is still following me
    I can't consider the word 'love' attached to you
    So many broken threads hold this heart together
    But you're only watching the clock tick back and forth.
    We sing the same words to the same song
    The only difference is our voices
    You can only see these eyes of sorrow
    But I can't see yours.
    So trust me, I will find you.
    This is my last trip home,
    so if you please, come with me.
    Can I kiss you one last time before I go?
    But only if you let me.
    Can I ever tell you how I actually feel?
    But only if I let me.




    Submitted on 2005-10-31 16:22:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i loved it. i know i relate even if others dont.
    keep writing

    "So many broken threads hold this heart together"
    ive written something similar to this.

    "You can only see these eyes of sorrow
    But I can't see yours.
    So trust me, I will find you.
    This is my last trip home,
    so if you please, come with me.
    Can I kiss you one last time before I go?
    But only if you let me.
    Can I ever tell you how I actually feel?
    But only if I let me."


    this is also amazing. only im not going home yet. i hope to read more by you soon.





    tina
    | Posted on 2008-02-29 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      well done the story line was easy but the ending was the best you are right you only give people what you want them to see to prevent showing emotion
    no bad intent given
    sandman
    | Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      umm... I kinda doont get it. I get some of it, but then some of it I dont get. Like I think some od it is about someone cheating and someone being jelouse about it. Am I right?? or am I off??

    Drea
    | Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by Drea | [ Reply to This ]
      deffinately favo material. im loving this. its like what i write.. semi random mixed in with everyday comments mized in with profound thought mixed in with smart sounding bull[censored]. (that is not meant to be offensive its a god thing!)
    | Posted on 2005-10-31 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
      interesting, very weird (in a good way)...the imagery is strange and unique, it sounds quite a bit like it could be a song...good stuff.

    Storm
    | Posted on 2005-10-31 00:00:00 | by OrionsStorm | [ Reply to This ]


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